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Name: Karan Bhullar
Joined: Dec 14, 2013
Last Post: Dec 28, 2013
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karanbhullar   
Dec 24, 2013
Undergraduate / I wanted to be an astronaut. Caltech's opportunities and resources, supplement essay [7]

This is my essay for Caltech on the topic: Scientific exploration clearly excites you (otherwise you wouldn't be applying to Caltech). What is it about Caltech's opportunities and resources that will best fuel your intellectual curiosity and develop your passion for science, technology, math or engineering? (500 words max)

Please comment.
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I remember convincing my father to buy me a telescope when I was young so that I can look at the moon and the stars and pretend to be a young scientist. Since my childhood I wanted to be an astronaut.

I was curious as to how all these Heavenly bodies were there just wandering about so perfectly. Questions like "How the universe was formed?", "Why do planets move?", "Where does sun come from?", etc were always in the back of my mind. None of my family member or friends could give me answers so i took to research. I started reading articles on the internet related to space and astronomy. I learned various new things on the internet, some of them very useful. And it was then that i started my habit of reading.

As I read more and more I came to know about the big bang theory and the creation of the universe. We were taught that atom is indivisible various number of times, but then in high school came nucleons and that concept was trashed. The knowledge of subatomic particles got me wondering and i found out about the standard model of particle physics ,or the sub subatomic particles as i call them, namely the quarks, leptons, bosons, etc. All the particles in the standard model were acceptable but the one thing that caught my eye was the Higgs boson or the supposedly 'god particle'. I was fascinated by it as it would explain the origin of mass according to the standard model.

I wanted to learn more about the particle and i came to know about CERN and their experiment with the Large Hadron Collider (LHC). I became interested in the research. It became a goal in my life to do research at CERN as i wanted to learn more and more things in the field of particle physics. And on 4th july, 2013 when the particle was finally discovered by CERN i had an uncontrollable excitement which i couldn't share with anyone as none of my peers knew about it.

That is the main reason i'm applying to Caltech because i know that here i will find people like me, who are excited for a new discovery, who have the passion for study, who want to contribute to the scientific community and science which has evolved us from apes to humans.

I knew from the beginning of my freshmen year that i was going into research. Whenever anyone asked me what I wanted to research in I always used to say particle physics. Due to its similarity with nuclear physics people thought i was talking about it and used to ask me jokingly if i was going to make an atomic bomb.
karanbhullar   
Dec 23, 2013
Scholarship / Professor Hoax - Nursing Student Scholarship - Why you are a qualified candidate? [6]

prides itself in hard work

prides itself on hard work

prevention and, counseling

I think the comma after 'and' is not needed

it's not surprising that I am in theHonors Program with a GPA of 3.76, multiple

You should use a more subtle approach. This information will be available in your resume. If not then you can use it here.

Therefore, I am qualified because I possess the qualities worthy of an outstanding scholarship leader .

Don't tell them directly, show them like in the previous paragraph.

You should make your last paragraph a little bit more subtle otherwise it is well written. ;)
karanbhullar   
Dec 18, 2013
Undergraduate / Drinking and Driving @ a B'day party ; COMMON APP [7]

Common app, failure, driving

Prompt: Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what lessons did you learn?

Hi everyone
I decided to write on how i failed to learn to drive and how i overcame it. Please suggest if it is fit for the topic. Thanks in advance.
karanbhullar   
Dec 15, 2013
Undergraduate / I love to learn about Sola system & Universe; Urbana champaign essay - interest in major [4]

Topic:Explain your interest in the major you selected. You may describe a related experience you've had to that area of study and/or your future career goals. Please limit your response to approximately 300 words.

Please be critical as it is my first time writing an essay.

Ever since I learned about the solar system and the universe, I was intrigued by it. Since my childhood I wanted to be an astronaut. I remember convincing my father to buy me a telescope when I was young so that I can look at the moon and the stars and pretend to be a young scientist.

I was curious as to how all these Heavenly bodies were there just wandering about so perfectly. Questions like "How the universe was formed?", "Why do planets move?", "Where does sun come from?", etc were always in the back of my mind. None of my family member or friends could give me answers so i took to research. I started reading articles on the internet related to space and astronomy. I learned various new things on the internet, some of them very useful. And it was then that i started my habit of reading.

As I read more and more I came to know about the big bang theory and the creation of the universe. I was fascinated as to how every body in this world that has mass came from a single particle i.e. the Higgs Boson or the supposedly 'god particle'. I wanted to learn more about the particle and i came to know about CERN and their experiment with the Large Hadron Collider (LHC). I became interested in the research. It became a goal in my life to do research at CERN as i wanted to learn more and more things in the field of particle physics. Whenever anyone asked me what I wanted to do research in I always used to say particle physics. Due to its similarity with nuclear physics people thought i was talking about it and used to ask me jokingly if i was going to make an atomic bomb.
karanbhullar   
Dec 15, 2013
Undergraduate / My Favorite Word is "Weird" - UVA supplement [3]

Your essay is really well written. It clearly explains the 'why' part. Just a little grammatical errors.

Time after time, history shows those who had the greatest impact on the world did so by finding ways to break the rules

Time after time, history has shown that those who made the greatest impact on the world did so by finding ways to break the rules
karanbhullar   
Dec 14, 2013
Undergraduate / Reading - Busy life/Activity for Pleasure Essay - MIT [4]

Hi i'm writing an essay on the topic: We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. In 100 words or less. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

I like to read. Not novels or scholarly literature but articles on the internet about new discovery or invention, new technology, or even a new phone or a new game in the market. Sometimes i read about human psychology other times about time management. All this reading has given me immense knowledge about the people and the world around me. I like to read about ways to experiment with my electronic devices and this has made me the go-to guy for all things tech among my peers and family.
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