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Name: Rounak Banik
Joined: Dec 18, 2013
Last Post: Dec 24, 2013
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School: D.A.V Boys Sr. Sec. School, Gopalapuram

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AminoPasta   
Dec 24, 2013
Undergraduate / Caste. Princeton Undergraduate Essay- How do we unlearn the practices of inequality? [6]

I think you misunderstood my point.
Firstly, *racial* inequality refers to ill-treatment on the basis of color, birth or origin. No way does racial inequality allude to economic and financial inequalities. There are black billionaires, there are white destitute too.

Secondly, I've only appealed at turning a deaf ear to this *racial* inequality. No where have I implied that economic and financial inequality should not be looked into. So, birth rates, family planning, inadequate resources, health care have nothing to do with my essay.

Color, gender, birth, nationality. These factors shouldn't decide how a person is treated. How do we make sure this happens? By not talking about it. That's exactly what I've tried to put across to you.
AminoPasta   
Dec 21, 2013
Undergraduate / U.S. AND IRAN SEEK OUT NUCLEAR DEAL. ISRAEL ENRAGED; EC Essay on MUN Crisis [3]

Given the word limit, I think it's a good essay.
But probably, you could add a few sentences as to why MUN was so meaningful to you and how it helped you develop your personality. From what people have told me, Colleges are more interested in knowing what you gained out of the activity rather than a description of the activity itself.

Cheers! :)
AminoPasta   
Dec 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / I plan to live in the United Kindom! [4]

These are the ones I could find. Please get your essay reviewed by someone else too. Cheers. :)
Corrected:
In the future I plan on living in in the United Kingdom . Why? Some may ask and that's a good question . The reasons for this isFirstly , because for oneof the concerts and the raves. TwoSecondly, because of thethe scenery the tall mountains and the extravagant buildings. Lastly because I cancould keep the pet I longed for the most to be mine.

The concerts in the UK are much more entertaining than the ones in America. Stage props and the set ups are far more advanced and well I guess though dangerous. These concerts bring tons of people all who seem to bond over the same common interest. Some even seem to help the bands out with the set up and takedown; something which American band fans don't do . This plusThe rules too are a little looser than American ones.

Then there is the scenery with the tall mountains and beautiful buildings. Many of the mountains there are lush and full of trees bearinghome to several woodland animals. Not only have that but The lakes seemed not do not seem to be as polluted as the American lakesones . Then you move to the cities and all the buildings are well made, sturdy and amazingly designed . One of the examples being Radcliffe; a very well designed round building.

Lastly I bring you to the subject of having my favorite animal. I've always wanted a pet fox and in the UK that is possiblewhich is possible in the UK . Many people who live in this area have such apets and it is widely accepted. So there won't be any judgment on my part for having the so beloved fox I've always wanted .

In conclusion I believe that it would be a great idea for me to go live in the UK after high school. My concert needs and my views on art will be met. This land just seems to be right for me and I can't wait to go live there.

Lastly, are you American? I don't think people would like you trashing your country in front of foreign admission officers.
AminoPasta   
Dec 18, 2013
Undergraduate / "You shouldn't let your fear take over your pleasure"; Urbana Champaign [2]

You overcame your fear of the ocean. It does go with the topic. But I feel you could elaborate a little more on how you overcame that fear. Devote a few more sentences to it. And use words like 'determined','persevered', show how YOU overcame that fear; not by a simple push from your cousin.

There are a few minor grammatical errors in your essay. Tell me if this is your final draft. I'll correct them for you. All the best :)
AminoPasta   
Dec 18, 2013
Undergraduate / Caste. Princeton Undergraduate Essay- How do we unlearn the practices of inequality? [6]

Reviews please. :)
UNLEARNING THE PRACTICES OF INEQUALITY
My teacher had just started taking a new chapter in World History. It was about Apartheid in South Africa; a system in which people were discriminated based on color. Being in the sixth grade, I was amused and found such racism to be 'silly' and 'childish'. I had never differentiated people based on color. But after that day, I began to see different colored people with different eyes.

I was filling up my school bio-data form. There was a sub-heading which read 'Caste'. My father filled it as 'SC'. I asked him what it meant. He said it stood for 'Scheduled Caste'. He then went on to tell me about the caste system and the practice of 'Untouchability'. He told me that we belonged to the Dalit Community, the most backward caste in the country. For centuries, we were socially oppressed, persecuted and forced to do menial tasks of upper caste people. We weren't even allowed to touch them. Although this practice was no longer in existence; the fact that I belong to a community which was once considered 'Untouchable' left me deeply depressed and disturbed. Admittedly, I began seeing my upper caste friends in a way I never saw them before.

I didn't know people could be discriminated based on color and birth. I was taught that.
No person is born with an impulse to hate. They learn to hate. Even in the time of Apartheid, no white man was born with hatred against the blacks instilled in him. No upper caste man was born with a natural tendency to be demeaning towards his inferiors. They were taught that by society.

When a person learns that his community had discriminated another, somewhere deep down, he starts feeling superior. He will no longer see people from the 'lower community' as his complete equals. He will only treat them equally thinking that he is 'being nice' and is doing them a 'favor'.

How to stop racism? Stop talking about it.
Think about it. Let's say one of your acquaintance is handicapped. What do you think would make her feel better? Constantly sympathizing with her or letting her live without mentioning her handicap to her?

When you stop mentioning something, it is destined to disappear and to be forgotten. Make no mention of Apartheid. People will forget that discrimination can take place based on color. Make no mention about gender atrocities. People will forget that a gender bias even existed. Make no mention of the caste system. People will forget about untouchability.

So, according to me, racism shouldn't me mentioned at all. It shouldn't be taught about in schools. Equality despite physical differences should be thought of to be as natural as trees being green. We don't constantly say, "The trees are green!", do we? Similarly, there shouldn't be a need to say, "Every person should be treated equally". It should come naturally, without question.

I believe every person is born with a natural capability to love. I am human. So are you. Therefore, I shall love you unconditionally regardless your nationality, race, religion, gender or sexuality. After all, you have the same red blood as I. You have the same number of eyes, the same number of legs as I. You are one of me. I cannot even think of bearing any ill for you. I shall feel love for you and love only.

These lessons of Universal Brotherhood and unconditional love should be taught to people. People can hate only if they know that it is possible to hate. Get rid of this possibility. Don't even mention hate practices. Keep them as hidden as Prester John's Land. It is only then can we truly unlearn the practices of inequality.
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