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Posts by Vanthai
Name: thainguyen
Joined: Jan 3, 2014
Last Post: Mar 3, 2014
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From: Viet Nam
School: Hanoi University of Science and Technology

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Vanthai   
Mar 3, 2014
Writing Feedback / Movies and television changing the way that we entertain; big influence [5]

From the first primary TV or movies in the past to modern TVs or blockbuster movies today, it is really apparent that TV and movies have been having tremendous effects on people's behavior. Researchers have been showing up a lot of those effects. But in this small essay, I just mention to the negative effects of TV or movies on people's behavior according to the three following main reasons.

First and foremost, TV or movies have been changing the way that we entertain. Instead of visiting zoos, we could stay at sweet home turning on TV then enjoying animal kingdom program. With a modern TV, you even could link the Internet, and then you could see all kinds of animals that you want.Instead of watching traditional plays or football match in a place hundreds kilometers away from home, people only just stay at home, and "all the world" is front of them with a small TV. It could be said that TV or movies have been supplying more means of entertainments.

The seconds could be mentioned to is that TV have been influence the way humans get information.TV programs supply much useful information in various fields such as politics, science and humanity. It is not to mention that the information supplied by TV is more incredible and up to date. Furthermore, many programs on TV show up a lot of rare historical documentary. Getting information through both of vision and audition make people remember and absorb knowledge better than that of single vision or audition. Movies, beside entertainment functions, also provide significant information of many angles of lives.

The last but not least, TV or movies have been changing interrelationship in families and society. All members of families spend more time together in front of TV. They all discuss about great movies or political issues. Therefore all members are linked together and the distance between members is disappeared. Similarly, friendship is also more and more better.

To sum up, it is obvious that TV or movies have been indisputable influence people's behavior on many aspects of life such as entertainment, information source, interrelationship and so forth. In other words, TV or movies have positive or negative effects on people's behavior is the controversial issue, but those things could make our lives betters in some ways.
Vanthai   
Mar 3, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2: What to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. [8]

I have some notes :)

News has been part of our life for decades

News has been a part of our life for decades

Many people work behind the process of news making, includes news editor who is f

Many people work behind the process of news making, includes news editor

This condition occurs because the sense of local people to local news is bigger.

This condition occurs because the sense of local people to the local news is bigger.
Vanthai   
Mar 3, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: WOMEN'S RIGHT TO CHOOSE PROFESSION [2]

Men are better at logical thinking and physically stronger,

"logical thinking" is a noun phrase while a adjective phrase is "physically stronger". those phrase are not equivalent in grammar function.

I suppose the above sentence should be: men are better at logical thinking and physical strength.
Vanthai   
Feb 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parents are the best teachers ? It's a controversial issue [9]

Shanaif
I really appreciate your great and dedicated helps. Could you interpret some your comments?
the first is: "parents also taught their children basic skills such as washing body, cooking, cleaning home...." (could you tell more clearly the reason why I made mistake in using the phrase "such as".)

the second is: to take care of their children (I think this grammar structure is good: take care of sb/sth.)
the third is: "For instance, when starting to learn how to walk, of course all of us felt a lot"
"this sentence need verb(s)" (what do you mean? The verb used is felt.)
the final is: "although parents are the best teachers is the controversial issue."
"this fragment sentence means need main sentence." (could you make this sentence clearly? or could you make your own sentence but remain the same idea of my sentence?)
Vanthai   
Feb 28, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parents are the best teachers ? It's a controversial issue [9]

someone could help me making it better?

Whether or not parents are the best teachers is a headachy issue and depends on one's point of view. In my opinion, parents are obviously the best teachers.

The first reason that makes me strongly believe my pointview is that parents give their children the first lessons. In most cases, parents, especially mothers, taught their children a lot through dulcet lullabies. Parents had been standing beside their sons and daughtors day by day. They helped us learn how to stand, how to walk. Furthermore, they helped their children how to speak the first voices. ". When their children become to have consciousness, they gave them much more imformation through good fables and parables. In daily life, parents also taught their children basic skills washing body, cooking, cleaning home, dealing with people, to name but a few. Time rapidly passes away and their children are given substantial supports to access to the "real worldThe next reason. It is apparent that parents are the first teachers of their children.

Secondly, the parents' dedication to their children is another reason that convinces my point of view. As the natural rule, parents usually spend a lot of their lifetime to take care of their children and give them helpful advice until their children are mature. Obviously, they are the patient teachers. Parents always accept their children faults. However, they try to find out a way to help their children go ahead. For instance, when starting to learn how to walk, of course all of us felt a lot. And our parents always raise us once we felt. They had been doing so untill their children could take steps in a steady way. Parents are those who are glad to you if you are glad, and feel sad if you're sad.

Finally, who do you think that have the most influence with your future life? The answer must be parents in most cases. From little, parents are those who infuse into their children several dreams. Some want to become doctors, others would like to become a lawer, and so forth. Almost of those dreams that children were chasing are infused by their parents. My father is the seasoned electrical engineer. I saw him fix a lot of electrical machines on the spot. This made me interested in electrical field, and this also is the reason why my major is electrical engineering now.

In conclusion, although parents are the best teachers is the controversial issue. But for all the mentioned above, I strongly believe that parents are obviously the best teachers.
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