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Posts by StwhWindresides
Name: Hana Real
Joined: Feb 27, 2014
Last Post: May 22, 2014
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From: Viet Nam
School: National Economics University

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StwhWindresides   
May 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS Letter - Write a letter asking your friend to join you on a holiday [3]

If I were Jose, I wouldn't be convince by your letter because i can't see clearly it benefit to me. You have to make sure that you not only need a company but also Jose will really love it. You can point something about that holiday that you think it will attract him. It's my opinion, thank you :)
StwhWindresides   
Apr 13, 2014
Writing Feedback / About My Times of Life - 'I had a nice childhood' [6]

I had a nice childhood. I was born in winter and I'm a Sagittarius girl. People always say that a Sagittarius girl is the best lucky one. She never feeling sad for long time and she always get in touch easily with any kinds of people. But I absolutely disagree with that. I know myself well and I know I'm not the best lucky girl. Also, I just get in touch easily with people who have the same language with me. I didn't know exactly how much weight I was when I was born but I heard from my mother that I was so small then. At that moment, my family was scared a lot that my life couldn't last for long. That's why I always get the most special treatment from my family. When I was a baby, I cried very much. I cried for hungry or the weather was too hot or because of sickness and many tiny things else. One year after birth, I could talk some easy words. My first speaking was for my grandfather. There was no surprise. My childhood pertained deeply with the care of my grandfather. Because my parents had to work all day so they couldn't get much time to look after me like my grandfather really did. I could walk when I was about /one and a half years old. When I was a little girl, I had a short hair. And I used to wear types of clothes for boys, play with boys. I was quite mischievous.

And now, I'm twenty two years old and of course I'm an adult. I'm going to graduate from my university next June. I have prepared for myself necessary knowledge and skills. Also, I have taken an English course so I can get further on my career in the future. I haven't got a boyfriend therefore I have lots of time on my own/ to do some weird things, gather with my family and hang out with my close friends.
StwhWindresides   
Apr 12, 2014
Scholarship / Scholarship Essay - Statement of Study Objective / Actuarial Science [4]

The dateline is on 15 April and I've been working on this essay for about 3 weeks until now -> The deadline
Specifically in social security, for about 70 years, the evaluation of American's social security is one of the responsibility of the office of the Chief of Actuary -> responsibilities

this numbers won't be meet the expectation the Industry's need of actuaries which predicted will increase to 1000 in the next 5-year nor the -> in neither the ... nor

I will opt to study Actuarial Sciences with minor in Economics Modelling. -> Modeling
It boast two interdiscpilinaries of conceptual framework approach to evaluate the valuation of liabilites. -> boasts...interdisciplinary...liabilities
StwhWindresides   
Apr 12, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: mobile phone; "Iron man" / "Weichat" - destroy social interactions? [8]

After having considered all the problems that I have discussed above, we can finally draw a conclusion that although mobile phones brings convenience of communication, they also contribute to some social problems -> All in all, we can conclude that mobile phone makes communication between people with people more convenient. But on the other hand, it is absolutely a main factor makes social interaction become more worse.
StwhWindresides   
Apr 11, 2014
Writing Feedback / Such a surprised day! Yesterday's weather was hard. It was changeable. [3]

Yesterday's weather was hard. It was changeable. In the morning, the weather was really horrible. The sun was not shining. Rain felt heavily without warming. The humidity was too high. It went up to 85 percent. Everything got dirty easily. The floor was wet. Down the streets, people moved carefully because the streets were quite slippery. All of above things warmed a grey Thursday. Anyway, I had to go to work as usual. When I arrived my office, a joyful news was informed to me that tomorrow, we are going to have a day off. It helped me forget totally about the bad weather. In the afternoon, the weather was pretty pleasant with light winds. There was no raining at all and it was getting brighter. At night, it rained for about 2 hours. I laid down in my bed, listened to sound of falling rain, watched some movies and discovered some new things on the internet. It became a delightful day to me.
StwhWindresides   
Apr 11, 2014
Scholarship / Scholarship for Master / Fashion Designers often consider themselves artists [7]

1.Fashion Designers often consider themselves artists, and as an artist, grants and scholarships can give you the opportunity to focus on your designs instead of worrying about the cost of books, tuition and supplies = Fashion Designers often consider themselves artists, and as an artist, grants and scholarships can give you the opportunity to focus on your designs without worrying about the cost of books, tuition and supplies.

2.Being the first child of my family, I have learned value of money in my early ages itself. = I'm the first child in my family so I have learned value of money in my early ages itself.

I think so, dear :)
StwhWindresides   
Feb 27, 2014
Speeches / A Sorrow Day [3]

Thanks a lot :)
StwhWindresides   
Feb 27, 2014
Speeches / A Sorrow Day [3]

I don't know exactly the reason for when I'm grey, I want to study English. I don't know what it means to me and how much it means to me. I think it is magic. Funny, right? But I don't care. People might say I'm crazy, but who cares? They are not me. How could they understand me? Today is a sorrow day for no reason. Things happened just like that. Forget about the reason. If we start asking why, we will go crazy. Everyday, I wonder about my purpose, my future and my problems. Why do everything get harder like that? I can't handle it. I feel confusing. I have a lot of question but all I get in return is " I don't know". I'm so useless. How can I end this thing?
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