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Posts by Daniel_LEE
Name: LI SHIPEI
Joined: Apr 26, 2014
Last Post: Apr 29, 2014
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Posts: 5  
From: Australia
School: La Trobe University

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Daniel_LEE   
Apr 29, 2014
Letters / Recommendation Letter on Applicant for Graduate Study (my favorite teacher) [2]

Please help me. I`m applying to graduate program. It`s a Recommendation Letter.

I take great pleasure in recommending Xin Zhao, one of my favorite teachers, for admission into your distinguished graduate program.

Miss Zhao impressed me among all the teachers during these years. One month later after her joined our group, she showed her talent in a teachers art performance. In my opinion, she might capture our initial impressions of polite, kind, and compassionate and she received the top respect from students in the investigation of "who is your favorite teacher" in the coming years. Different from other traditional Chinese teachers, she acted as friends of students, and was loved and respected the most by them.

As a music teacher, with her professional technique, she performed many times and trained the students for numerous performances to win the award for our school. To my surprise, she has not only strong intelligence in music, but also abilities in other ways. Outstanding skills in sentence structure procured her to be correspondent and to do presentation represented the school. As I know, she wrote writing thesis about teaching strategies and psychological research.

She is always particularly sensitive to students needs and appreciative of their potential and advantages intensively, and patience is necessary to perceive students deal with their disadvantages appropriately .How luckily the students are!

In terms of teaching technology, teachers who attended her lectures

Throughout the years she worked conservatively with those teachers, and helped not only herself, but also others around her who were not progressing and improving as quickly as she could. Xin she is undoubtedly was born a teacher, which can be further developed and she is sure to give all of you a big surprise in your school. So I enthusiastically recommend her for admission to the university. Please do not hesitate to contact me at XXX if you need more information.
Daniel_LEE   
Apr 29, 2014
Writing Feedback / Mindfulness Reflection - Communications course essay [3]

Before long, [I think it`s informal]
DuBrin (2010) explains [explained]
Because it was in 2010.
In summary , [To sum up or In brief]
Because many writing teachers think In conclusion and In summary are overused.
Daniel_LEE   
Apr 29, 2014
Scholarship / 'Never leave an unfinished product on display' - personal statement essay [4]

so i [am] applying for a scholarship
I have always remembered to finish what I have started[my work].
I learned that have[having] something on display is better than having nothing.

While many of my friends receive[received] special education by going to cram school, I tried my best to keep up with them

I think you should find some articles about personal statement essay. Use more formal words and academic words.
Daniel_LEE   
Apr 28, 2014
Letters / Confidential Report on Applicant for Graduate Study [5]

Please help me. I`m applying to graduate program. It`s a Recommendation Letter.

Dear Colleagues,

As a teacher in Department of Art, Ludong University, a leading teacher-training university in China, I am very pleased to take this opportunity to recommend one of my favorite students to your MED program.

As her teacher in specialized courses, actually my first contact with Xin was more
than a decade years ago, when I was invited to accompany for the Chorus, during the days, she presented an intelligent girl.

When her sophomore year of university, despite I was not her teacher at that time, she came to me to ask for learning composition and harmonics. After I refused her one time, she did not give up but requested for an entrance exam to get the chance of being my student. Being a student, she was seriously studying and practicing, in spite of I was well known for rigor. As a matter of fact, I am clearly understand no one could put up with it, except the little girl who was always having classes and practicing alone in my garage where there are some broken bikes and two pianos from 12.00p.m. to 22.00p.m. twice a week. Particularly impressed me is one day it was a heavy snow, she came to have classes lonely, what made me firmly believe that she was a girl who was worth training well.

In the next time, as time permitted, when I went to other places to have academic exchanges, she usually went along with us to work as an assistant. Through her contributions, the promising young girl helped not only herself, but also others around her.

Three years later, although she passed the exam and to be a music teacher, she never give up her initial dream in learning music a nd kept on learning to me. With abandon of knowledge obtained by reading, she could discuss with me about some professional questi ons.

If you have any questions or concerns in regards Xin, please feel free to contact me at .Thank you for your time.
Daniel_LEE   
Apr 28, 2014
Speeches / Attack of the Dung Beetles [4]

They took me prisoner as a child, held me hostage to barbarism

They took me prisoner as a child and helped me hostage to barbarism.
Daniel_LEE   
Apr 26, 2014
Undergraduate / Personal Statement, MPH Environmental Health [2]

I never knew exactly how my grandmother's experience would ultimately affect me.
I think you should use Past Participle in here.

You`re applying to Environmental Health. Your future mentors and colleagues are not interested in your family dramas, but if, for example, a family member's mental illness influenced your decision to get a degree in clinical psychology, you can include that. So telling a relevant story is good but not too many.

No one should have to experience being forgotten from the woman who raised you, and no one should have to watch her lose her ability to form complete sentences and even forget how to eat with a fork and knife;

The sentence is great! How about mine? If you like it, you can use it.
No one should have to experience being forgotten from the woman who witnesses your childhood.

Sorry, my English is not good.
Daniel_LEE   
Apr 26, 2014
Graduate / Personal statement for Master of Education in University of Windsor [2]

I am applying for Master of Finance in University of Windsor.
Please help me to point out mistakes and weaknesses in my personal statement. Thank you very much.

Description: The Statement of Academic Objectives and Research Interests describes your reasons for pursuing graduate study in the Faculty of Education at the University of Windsor. Your statement should include, but not be limited to, a description of:

Your research interests;
How your previous studies and experience have prepared you for the program;
Your career and scholarly objectives;
How you perceive the graduate degree will advance these objectives.
In your statement you should also mention up to four elective courses offered by the Faculty of Education in which you might be interested in enrolling and how you perceive these courses as advancing your educational objectives. Maximum 2 pages, hard copy only


Recently the Institute of Population and Labor Economics at the Chinese Academy of Social Sciences figures show an alarming 12 percentage decrease in the demand of primary teachers in the next ten years because of predicted decline in the total students. These figures are just one more factor that makes me have a sense of unemployment crisis, and then motivates me to study further at Master level in this field in order to help combat this serious problem.

At present, China's education ministry emphasizes the correlation between creative education and foundation education. However, most of teachers have been utilizing in typical traditional mode of teaching that is indoctrination education for several years, which makes me realize that it is hardly to meet the multiple demands for education of children with this way. In addition, out of my expectation, the current position is not eligible to offer me better training opportunities and further education skills which can satisfy my academic pursuits and vocational development in the coming years.

These years, I have gradually begun to focus on students' psychological process from their language, facial expression and daily behaviors that are beneficial to deal with problem behaviors effectively, which is my personal interest. However, due to lack of a solid set of modern education knowledge and skills, I am deeply aware that I cannot develop my interest adequately.

By reading the program website, courses of Psychology of Learning and Teaching as well as the Psychology of Learning problems are the best for a positive teaching effect, including sufficiently catching students' attention, motivating their initiative and helping them to keep their interests. When it comes to communication effectively with appropriate volume and expression with students and their parents, courses of Language Arts in Elementary School and Information and Communication Technologies for Teaching and Learning are necessary to resolve these problems.

As Confucius once said, "Choose a job you love, and you will never have to work a day in your life." To take full advantage of my teaching skills, I have entered the service in Huang Wu Primary School since 2007. In daily work, I often participate in kinds of programs such as lesson observation, evaluation and seminar. In addition, I have published some articles like 'Thinking in Singing' and 'The Thechorus Training in Primary School' in the 'Zhi Fu Education Journal'. Therefore, they give me an opportunity to know more about myself and about what life means to me. It makes me realize that advantages of this job is not only the achievement of imparting music knowledge to students, but also through a series of teaching ways to maximize their music potential. Therefore, educational work and helping children have always been the most joyful things in my life.

My education experience makes me prepare for studying in University of Windsor. During my four academic years in the Lu Dong University, I majored in education of music. At this highly respected higher-learning of teacher education institute, I received scholarship for my distinguished academic performance. Moreover, it is necessary for self-learners to read more books of multiple aspects, and I read plentiful professional books in music and psychology, which benefits the mastery of professional theory and knowledge. Taking 'Battle Hymn Of The Tiger Mother' and 'The Little Girl At The Window' as examples, I could learn the different teaching ways between Asian country and Western country, which makes me understand the field of education deeply. As a student who majored in music, I took part in the work of organization of some concerts and acted the member of organizing committee of international chorus festival. Furthermore, communicating successfully with a sponsor for our school DV play was good for my communication skills. Fortunately, worked as a broadcaster and a reporter, the ability of acquiring and editing information had been improved completely.

In view of following qualifications that I have acquired, I believe that I will acquit myself satisfactorily in the prospective M.E.D program in education that I am currently endeavoring to apply for. University of Windsor, with its high-quality education, distinguished faculty and eminent fellow students, could undoubtedly facilitate me in the achievement of remarkable academic progress and fulfill my aspiration to become an accomplished teacher in the field of education. This would not only bring my patriotic fervor into reality but also make my life more meaningful and rewarding.
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