Writing Feedback / TOEFL These days telling a lie become a prevalent activity to strengthen relationship between people [2]

A/DA=Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.
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In the development of human modern society, some people think that the value of some moral principles is decreasing more and more, so they act without honoring moral principles especially in their relationship between people. I strongly believe that moral standards are unchangeable in every situation, and we should have faith in the principals. If you dishonor those, you will experience some harmful and unavoidable events in your personal life. My view is based on intellectual and psychological outlook.

First, from an intellectual standpoint, some imprudent partners usually tell white lies about banal issues in their common lives. They think that it could improve marital fidelity between partners. On the other hand, it is a heinous activity because just a small white lie could ruin your whole life. All over the news, we watch and hear many true stories about such events in the real lives. Some of them even causes murders and criminal cases. A client who is my old friend tell me stories about such criminal cases that are initiated by a ridiculous lie. It started a big fraction between partners; as a result man or woman is killed or maimed.

Second, in a psychological point of view, telling lies has many negative ramifications in our minds. Furthermore, nowadays many psychological studies in the high prestigious universities have shown that the partners who usually tell lies to each other have a very short time relationship. Also, they could not take trust of other people in their next relationship. Moreover, they always think that other people tell lies to them, so it has a harmful effect on their minds.

To put everything in a nutshell, these days telling lie become a prevalent activity to strengthen relationship between people. Some people think that it is a beneficial activity. However, with aforementioned reasons, I show that telling the truth is always the best policy in your life.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL - There are many parents that invest more and more money to prosper their children [2]

Please correct my independent TOEFL essay.
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With the flourishing modern educational system, an issue of concern turning into an obsession for a great many parents is whether they should involve in their children's education or not. I strongly believe that nowadays parents more involved in their children's education. My view is based on university tuition and assignments.

First of all, in an economical point of view, parents should pay a lot of money to submit their children in the universities or colleges. Needless to say they aware about the crucial impacts of higher education on the prosperity of their children in the future. Therefore, the parents investigate not only about majors of study, but also about the high prestigious universities. They try to encourage their children to participate in the prosperous majors such as law and politics. Also, they pay much money to improve their grades for applying in the high prestigious universities when the children were senior high school student. The parents have seen many successful technological CEO have graduated from famous universities such as Stanford and Harvard. Thus, they hope their children can participate such universities.

Last but not least, these days, we have witnessed the teachers give many advanced and technological assignments to the students. Some students don't have enough time or knowledge to do the exercises, so they nag to the parents to help them. For instance, my cousin always asks her parents to do computer programming assignments. My uncle searches about the problems on the internet and sometimes ask me to help my her. Although this activity is not appropriate, many students do the same activity. In addition, the parents involve solving the problem and doing the homework.

To put everything in a nutshell, in the development of human modern society, the parents get involved their children's education and profession. There are many parents that invest more and more money to prosper their children. Moreover, the parents have been imposed by some children to do their homework.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL_inventors and science pioneers always try new things and take risks [2]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Throughout history, there have been many inventions and breakthroughs have invented by brave persons. The people who not only can't tolerate the status quo, but also decide to change it profoundly. In my opinion, successful people always try new things and take risks. They try to change the world in the proper ways to prosper our societies. My view is based on the CEOs of technological start-ups and scientific researchers.

First of all, in the recent days we witnessed a great number of fledgling CEOs that have changed our world profoundly. For instance, Mark Zuckerberg is the most famous in this realm. He was a former student in a high prestigious university, Harvard University. However, a brilliant idea rushed to his mind. The idea was a social network that the students of the university could connect with each other through an internet website. After the occurrence, he had decided to abandon the university and had started to design an unprecedented website. It is crystal clear that the decision had a high level risk, but he accepted that completely. Nowadays, he is the one of the most prosperous person in the world. He doesn't have a PhD degree, but he is famous as well as rich. The Facebook stock price is growing day to day on Wall Street. So, taking a risk could change your life dramatically.

Last but not least, many scientific breakthroughs have been discovered by brave researchers and scholars. They take risks and even they endanger their life to discover or invent new devices, materials, or results. For example, Charles Darwin was one of them. He had a lot of journeys through exotic areas with a ship to find and document unknown animals and plants. He had a brilliant mind and his researches achieve to hypothesize evolution and natural selective process.

To put everything in a nutshell, in the development of modern human society, we owe our convenience to inventors and science pioneers. It is blindingly obvious that they are iconoclasts and take risks to invent new things or change ordinary objects.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL IBt Integrated task - decreasing number of sea otter (western coast of US) [2]

Please score and correct my essay. Thanks in advance!

The writer claims that environmental pollution leads to decreasing number of sea otter that lives in water along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. However, the lecturer rebuts the author's reasons and asserts that attacks by predators is the most important reasons for that issue.

First, the passage asserts that oil rigs and industrial chemical resources, based on water sample evidences, causes to decline number of sea otters. In contrast, the speaker believes that if chemical substances has killed these animals, we would see the corpse of dead animal on there regularly. However, hunted animals may be eaten by the predators and anyone couldn't see those.

Second, other types of sea mammals were also declining along coastal regions of North America. So it shows that environmental pollution plays an important role. On the other hands, it seems that human hunters killed a large number of whales, the main source of nourishments for orca, so it causes to change orca's diet to sea otter and other types of sea mammals such as sea lions.

Third, the author believes that uneven pattern of otter declines reveals this fact that environmental pollution affects on decreasing number of otters. However, she asserts that uneven pattern could prove innocent of environmental pollution. Since, evidences show that number of sea otters stay unchanged on inaccessible places because gigantic orcas can't reach to rocky or shallow regions.