Writing Feedback / IELTS: only some of children's leisure activities should be educational [3]

IELTS:Writing Task 2

Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relrevant examples from your experience.
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Some people say that children should always do educational activities in their free time.According to these people, children's non-educational activities are a complete waste of time.I agree with the idea that children should do educational activities when they are free , but I think that some not all of children's leisure activities should be educational.Also, I disagree with the view that other kinds of activities are a complete waste of time.In contrast, they are more important that educational ones.

It is generally accepted that children must do some educational activities in their spare time.Children could learn important lessons from doing educational activites, and these lessons would benefit them in their future.For example, some of the computer games are educational.Children could learn useful things from playing these types of games.For instance, some of the computer games teach children mathematics.It is understood that the educational activities are beneficial for children.However, I believe that not all leisure activities should be educational.

Although educational activities could benefit kids, they do not have to do only these kinds of activities.Only some of children's activities in their leisure time should be for educational purposes.I believe so because educational activities are not as useful as other types of activities.For example, doing sports is more important and useful than educational activities.The reason why playing sports is more important is that it helps people, especially children and teenagers keep fit and healthy.Doing sports make children feel happy and energetic too.Thus non-educational activities like sports are more important than educational ones, because they help children keep fit and make them feel delighted.

In conclusion, only some of children's leisure activities should be educational.Children have to do non-educational activities as well.Activities that are educational are not as important and useful as those that are not educational .

Writing Feedback / Britain is the country with the highest amount spent on the six consumer goods. [4]

IELTS : Writing Task 1:

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

You should write at least 150 words.

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The bar chart below gives information about the amount of money spent on six consumer goods in four countries.The four countries are all in Europe ; Britain, France, Germany and Italy.The six consumer products that are shown in this chart are ; personal stereos, tennis racquets, perfumes, CDs, toys and photographic films.The numbers along the horizontal axis represent thousands of pounds sterling that are spent on the goods, while the different goods are on the vertical axis.

According to this chart, Britain is the country with the highest amount spent on the six consumer goods.It is also obvious from the chart that Germany's spending on three goods are the lowest.These goods are CDs, photographic film, and toys.The amounts spent on personal stereos in Germany and France are the lowest.Their spendings on this particualr product are equal.It can be seen from the chart that Italy's spendings on tennis racquets and perfumes are the second highest after that of Britain.Moreover, the chart indicates that the amount spent on tennis racquets in Italy is slightly lower than that in Britain.Another thing that is shown in the chart is that Italy's expenditure on toys is similar to France's spending on the same products.Also, their spendings are the second largest.France's spendings on toys and CDs are the second highest followed by Italy and Germany in third and fourth positions respectively.

Overall, Britain's expenditure on the six consumer goods is the highest of the four European countries, whereas Germany has the lowest spending on three products (CDs, photographic film and toys), and France has the least figure for spending on two goods ( perfumes and tennis racquets).Both of Germany and France have the lowest value for the remaining good ( personal stereos).

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The chart is attached.It is on a word 2007 file.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: traditional skills and ways of life die out because of technology [5]

IELTS: Writing Task2

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out.It is pointless to try and keep them alive.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

You should write at least 250 words.

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Today, many nations develop their technologies in order to raise the standards of living of their citizens.But, when a country makes its technological development, the traditional skills and ways of life in that country inevitably die out.I believe there is no good reason to try to keep these things alive.

When a new technology is developed in any place, the traditional skills and ways of life in that place often cease to exist as a result of this.For example, people in the past, especially during pre-historic times, were used to live in caves.But, when houses were built , people no longer lived in caves.Another example, is that people used animals such as camels and horses as means of transport.After the invention of motor vehicles, they did not depend on these animals for transfer anymore.Instead, they will drive their cars or use the public transport system.However, in some poorer countries we can see animals like horses and donkeys are still used for transfers.Some people believe it is necessary to keep the traditional ways of life.According to them, traditions are important parts of a country's culture.If traditional skills and ways of life in a country died out, then this would probably have a negative impact on this country's culture.Even though this view might be right, I think it is pointless to try to preserve the traditional skills and ways of life.

In my opinion, technological developments are more important than keeping traditions.I think so, because technology has made our lives better and easier.For instance, cell phones enable us to contact our acquaintances and friends easily and quickly.Another technology that has influenced us is the Internet.Undoubtedly,the Internet has a great impact on our lives.For example, students are now able to access thousands of dictionaries and reference books online.Also, the Internet makes it possible for some children to study at home instead of going to schools.In addition, we can keep in touch with people who are living abroad by social networking.

The conclusion is that countries should continue to develop their technologies, even if this will lead to the death of some traditional skills and ways of life.Technological developments are essential to make our lives easier and improve the standards of living.

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Writing Feedback / Is international sport releasing patriotic emotions? 'fans support their teams' [4]

Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opnion?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

You should write at least 250 words.
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It is generally accepted that international sporting events such as the soccer World Cup and the Olympic Games are important, because they help ease international tensions and give us the chance to show our patriotic emotions in a peaceful way.I tend to agree with this view for many reasons.In the following lines I will give reasons for my opinion.

International sporting events like the FIFA World Cup are so popular that almost all national football teams hope to qualify to it.At least thirty football teams from thirty countries participate in this important event.In addition, football fans from different countries attend the sporting event in order to support their teams.So, the World Cup gives us the opportunity to meet new people from other countries and learn about their cultures.If people from different nationalities met each other and learned about other countries' cultures, then there would be a better understanding between them and this could help ease international tensions.There would be no conflicts in our world, if peoples understood each other.

Not only sporting occasions can ease international tensions, but also they help us release our patriotic emotions in a safe way.For example, in the Olympic Games we can see athletes from different corners of the world compete for the gold medals.These athletes know well that they represent their countries, so if they win, their countries win too.They show their love to their countries in a safe way. Thus an international event like the Olympic Games provide us the chance to show our patriotic feelings safely.

The conclusion is that popular international sporting events like the FIFA Wolrd Cup and the Olympic Games are important because they could ease international tensions, and help us show our patriotism in a peaceful and safe way.

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