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Britain is the country with the highest amount spent on the six consumer goods.


mohamedtheking 4 / 6 1  
May 15, 2014   #1
IELTS : Writing Task 1:

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

You should write at least 150 words.

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The bar chart below gives information about the amount of money spent on six consumer goods in four countries.The four countries are all in Europe ; Britain, France, Germany and Italy.The six consumer products that are shown in this chart are ; personal stereos, tennis racquets, perfumes, CDs, toys and photographic films.The numbers along the horizontal axis represent thousands of pounds sterling that are spent on the goods, while the different goods are on the vertical axis.

According to this chart, Britain is the country with the highest amount spent on the six consumer goods.It is also obvious from the chart that Germany's spending on three goods are the lowest.These goods are CDs, photographic film, and toys.The amounts spent on personal stereos in Germany and France are the lowest.Their spendings on this particualr product are equal.It can be seen from the chart that Italy's spendings on tennis racquets and perfumes are the second highest after that of Britain.Moreover, the chart indicates that the amount spent on tennis racquets in Italy is slightly lower than that in Britain.Another thing that is shown in the chart is that Italy's expenditure on toys is similar to France's spending on the same products.Also, their spendings are the second largest.France's spendings on toys and CDs are the second highest followed by Italy and Germany in third and fourth positions respectively.

Overall, Britain's expenditure on the six consumer goods is the highest of the four European countries, whereas Germany has the lowest spending on three products (CDs, photographic film and toys), and France has the least figure for spending on two goods ( perfumes and tennis racquets).Both of Germany and France have the lowest value for the remaining good ( personal stereos).

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The chart is attached.It is on a word 2007 file.
ammus1 10 / 29  
May 15, 2014   #2
Hai friend,please attach the graph and your introduction seems too lengthy,try to write a short report including all details because u got only 20 minutes for this task.
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
May 16, 2014   #3
The bar chart below gives information about the amount of money spent on six consumer goods in four countries.The four countries are all in Europe ; Britain, France, Germany and Italy.The six consumer products that are shown in this chart are ; personal stereos, tennis racquets, perfumes, CDs, toys and photographic films.

This is the introduction of your essay and it needs to be short and direct. Paraphrasing the prompt is a really good way to do that. You don't need to list every single thing mentioned in the chart.

The bar chart presents data concerning the expenditure on six consumer goods in four countries, namely Britain, France, Germany and Italy.

The numbers along the horizontal axis represent thousands of pounds sterling that are spent on the goods, while the different goods are on the vertical axis.

You are writing this to a university lecturer so this is unncessary. That's what readers have already known.
As the chart has yet to be attached, I cannot give you any feedback on the contents of your body paragraphs. However, as you are to write a report, using numbers to clarify the differences among these countries will make your essay more interesting, instead of using words like "highest" or "lowest" only.

Hope it helps!
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
May 16, 2014   #4
Hai friend,please attach the graph and your introduction seems too lengthy,try to write a short report including all details because u got only 20 minutes for this task.

Yes, this is very important for us to provide you with meaningful feedbacks. Use the "Attach file (s)" feature that you find in the Message block to upload your charts.


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