Writing Feedback / Writing task 2: studying overseas can be difficult at first, but gaining experience make it worth it [7]

Topic: Some people say that studying overseas brings students many wonderful experiences. Others disagree and think that students may encounter difficulties in term of language and lifestyle. What is your opinion?

Some are in favor of view that students will have many interesting experiences when they go abroad to study. On the other hand, others disagree with this idea, believing that as well as studying overseas, students might confront several problems in term of language and lifestyle. This essay is going to analyze both views and clarify that students still should be supported to study abroad.

To begin with, it is true that there are numerous problems resulting from going abroad. First of all, students will definitely encounter difficulties in language. Obviously, they have to communicate with citizens by another language, so this will probably bring about varieties of troubles. For instance, the students who are not really good at using non-native language cannot buy food from markets or understand the lectures at school. In addition, lifestyle is an intricate issue that students must adapt. To specify, the time zone and culture are two typical aspects of lifestyle. This means, not only students must suddenly change their previous timetables, but do they also need to learn manners for treating to foreigners.

However, from my perspective, encouraging students to study overseas is really necessary. Firstly, exploring new cultures is an exciting and attractive point for students. To clarify, they will have more opportunities to visit famous destinations and gain more knowledge about the culture, especially investigate from successful people around the world, which might remarkably assist them in their careers in the future. Another benefit is that students are likely to become more independent. Clearly, if students could depend on their parents for doing the housework in the past, they must do all of these things now because they are living alone in a foreign nation. Especially they have to solve any trouble that they meet, and since there, they will be more responsible of their acts, such as taking care of their health in case they get disease, or fixing any mistake that they cause.

In conclusion, although studying overseas can be difficult at first, it is, in my opinion, still really worth for students to experience.

Hope to receive all your advices :)

Writing Feedback / Is the economic development more important than protecting the environment? [3]

Topic: Is the economic development more important than protecting the environment for future generations? What is your opinion?

Protecting environment and developing economy are both necessary works that human have responsibility to do at present. Anyways, I completely agree with the statement because of the reasons below.

First and foremost, economy is the basis of everything. Obviously a nation cannot prosper without the economy; a developing economy brings about the advancement of other industries such as tourism and energy. Moreover, any flourish country is always respected by underdeveloped countries, which means that country holds own hands the power to govern others, even world economy, by fully utilizing the resources and abilities of alternative countries. As a result, the culture, which has economic forcefulness, is more and more prosperous and profitable.

Furthermore, recovering millions of miserable people is more important than saving natural resources. It is an evident fact that every-year, there are millions of people dying because of starvation, and it continues to increase if the government does nothing. It supposes that there are more jobs created owing to economic development, the homeless population will definitely decrease since employers are able to hire suitable accommodations by earning money from their employments. Certainly the natural resources will be faded away in case there is no human support anymore.

Besides it, with scientific advancement at present, the industrialization has been putting much less polluting agents on the environment. Also, developing countries afford to learn from the environmental mistakes of the developed world's industrial revolution. For instance, nuclear generating plants are able to provide more energy than coal while contributing far less to global warning. We are also exploring alternative, renewable types of energy such as solar and hydro-power.

In conclusion, in my opinion, I would like to say that economic development is the most necessary issue that any undeveloped country needs to carry out immediately. What is more important than economic development now, especially to unstably economic countries?

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Writing Feedback / One of the interesting differences in culture between America and Vietnam [2]

Topic:

Compare the culture between America and Vietnam by 1 paragraph

(should detail only 1 pattern)

Before you go abroad for travelling or studying, you should have some knowledge of its cultures or you will feel a bit shocked. There are several dissimilarities of the greeting pattern between Vietnam and America which assist you in not being new to the surroundings.

Firstly, the courtesy for meeting others has a few diversities, compared to 2 countries. In particular, Americans shake hand with the opposite sex ordinarily, otherwise Vietnamese slightly bow the head or put the hands in front of the chest in order to show more respect. In addition, Americans afford to greet anyone in the family first, contrarily a Vietnamese salutes the head of a household or an older person first, then the youngest ones.

Moreover, the manner of expressing friendliness is a considerable contrast as well. For instance, people in America usually exchange cheek-kisses to reveal how much they like or love each other, but in Vietnam they never do that and it even causes shock to most married woman.

Furthermore, the mode of making clear happiness by slapping someone on the back is acceptable in America. However, it is insulting to Vietnamese, especially to women and then the person who did that will be considered as a rude guy in Vietnamese eyes.

In conclusion, each region has its own amazing culture and it can make people from others a little bit stunned. Even though, exploring them is an interesting job which may bring everybody some fantastic experiences.

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Thank you a lot.