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Name: angela tagata
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gela07   
Sep 10, 2014
Writing Feedback / Fashion is becoming more and more important in choosing cloths [4]

hi this is my suggestion about your essay

This essay looks at idea in favor and against fashion. i think you don't need to put this on your essay.

It seems that every body concerns about
my suggestion: It seems that everybody was concern about...
gela07   
Sep 9, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Education should be considered as the most important factor in a country's success [10]

as I observed in your essay you should balance the sentences in each paragraph because in your first and second paragraph it has 2 to 3 sentences.

Then the body of your paragraph has 5 to 6 sentences and your conclusion has only 1 sentence. Try to explain further your opinion in your conclusion and leave a take home message for the readers.
gela07   
Sep 9, 2014
Writing Feedback / Eating at home is far better than to dine in a restaurants - IELTS writing task 2 [5]

task: eating at restaurants in convenient for many people; but some prefer eating at home because it is much cheaper.
discuss both views and give your opinion.


One of the basic needs of human aside from water and air is food. A human needs food to sustain his or her daily activities and food is a good source of energy. Before, families were used to eat at home because restaurants are not a trend. Nowadays, a lot of restaurants and fast food chains are rising because selling food is a good business and it is a necessity for people. Although restaurants are a convenient place to eat I still prefer having my meal at home because I know it is more appetizing and healthy.

Eating at restaurants have a greater advantage for busy people and for those who do not have time to prepare for their meals. Dining at restaurant would be a good choice for quick lunch or dinner because customers will just take a seat, order a meal, eat, pay and leave they will not worry who will wash the dishes or clean the dinning area. But eating outside have also disadvantages like high selling price, long queue due to many customers and some do not serve fresh and healthy food. Customers also are not aware what ingredients the restaurant are using and how it is prepared.

In the Philippines, even may restaurants are built Filipinos still prefer to eat at home because some believe at family ties. Aside from the cheaper cost, the value of eating with the family is important were they can bond and have quality time together. If there are old adults at home who will prepare a meal it is better to eat at home to avoid additional expenses and knowing it is freshly served and cooked with love by a family member. The disadvantage of dining at home maybe is waiting too long before the food can be serve.

In my conclusion, now we live in a busy world and some have a lot to do but still eating at home is far better than to dine in a restaurants. Even it is convenient and some offers promo or buffet dinning, I do not want to risk my health and having a heart disease someday.
gela07   
Sep 8, 2014
Writing Feedback / Ielts: gender equality - behavior of people become different from past to present [4]

The position of women has changed markedly in the last 20 years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children.

As the world evolves, changes and behavior of people also become different from past to present. An example is the gender equality. Before, women are the homemaker and the society did not acknowledged their worth but now communities are open and believed that women can also do jobs like what men does. Nowadays women still work even they are married and have their own family. The reason behind this is maybe their husband's salary is not enough to provide for the whole family. Second is they want to provide a better education and life for their children and lastly, some women are simply career minded.

I believe that a person wants to have a comfortable life and be a good provider for the family. But some parents or mothers forget that their children are longing for love and affection and they suffer because mothers were focused on giving their family a wonderful life. The young people were misguided because they are receiving less attention from their parents.But some mothers even they are not working still neglect their role in taking care of their children that result in juvenile delinquency.I do not think that the working mothers received all the blame for the misconduct of the children because in raising a child it is important that their is a balance of guidance between a mother and a father they should work hand in hand and environment also is a big factor for a child that is growing up.

In my conclusion I strongly disagree that married women who works is to be blame with regards to the juvenile delinquency of young people if the mother is doing her part to take care the children and sustaining the needs of the family. The young people are the one who is responsible for his or her own action. I believe that if children are raised well and guided by parents even exposed to different factors like school, friends they will not do juvenile delinquency.
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