Graduate / The largest building society in the world and UK's first internet banking; Proffesional Cover Letter [6]

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Graduate / The largest building society in the world and UK's first internet banking; Proffesional Cover Letter [6]

I made some corrections, please let me know what you think. Thank you very much for the feedback @Icturn87.

Dear Mr. XX,

It is with great enthusiasm that I submit my application for the Digital & Change Graduate Programme 2015, which I believe may report to you. I want to join Nationwide Building Society because it would be fantastic to turn something that I am passionate about (strategy and technology) into a profession in the financial services industry at a diverse site.

I am convinced I would be the right person to join the programme because of the exceptional analytical skills I have developed while studying a double degree in Business & Law and interning at a multinational advising firm, giving me a broad knowledge in areas ranging from strategic management to M&A law.

Also, my enriching international experiences (I am a Spanish citizen that has studied and travelled extensively around the world) have broadened my adaptability, eager to learn, and the people skills that seem to fit with Nationwide Building Society adding diversity to the organization. My language skills would also be an asset. I want Nationwide to be my next challenge.

Despite not having a technology educational background it is an area that excites me, in which I spend part of my free time keeping up-to-date in the latest technology releases. During a 3-year period at my residence hall I was in charge of solving my mates IT problems and I am frequently asked for advice.

During my time at Columbus, Ohio (USA) I got to make friends that work at Nationwide Insurance, letting me know what to "put members first" meant. I have no doubt that joining Nationwide Building Society would be a correct decision. Not only it is the largest building society in the world, but holds a sustained technology and innovation competitive edge: from launching the UK's first internet banking service in 1997 to recently being the first UK financial services provider to launch an app for smartwatches.

What excites me the most about this opportunity is both the rotation component of the programme so we are able to get an insight of the whole business in the area and the constant feedback for improvement that we would receive. What has taken me to succeed at world-class institutions is my desire to get better and trying my best in whatever thing I do, as my results reflect.

I would love the opportunity to meet with you and discuss the value that I can bring to the organization. Please check my portfolio for a deeper insight of myself, my projects and grades. I appreciate your consideration and look forward to hearing from you. Feel free to call me at XX or email at XX@gmail.com.

Sincerely,

XX

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Internet excellence for communicating people and finding information [7]

Hi! I agree that you could have structured this in a different way. In my oppinion, you could blend the second paragraph (where you talk about the benefits) and then create a new one with the disadvantages (then, you could start with "on the other hand"), which you already introduced in your second paragraph with the sentence "However, the easiest communication by the internet may deficient people productivity as it is used for unnecessary chat". Other disadvantages could be the lack if reliability (i.e. Wikipedia) and security (i.e. hackers).

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I have remembered remember the a day that I arrived in America at Detroit airport.

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making speeches or presentation is(are) communication skills that is(are) not really influencing in people's job over the period.

Undergraduate / Linkedin Statement - determination and drive to excel inside and outside the classroom [3]

Thank you!

I want it to have a bit more like a resume style as I need to apply with linkedin to some positions, thanks for the feedback!