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humangun

Apr 23, 2015

Writing Feedback / Could technology help developing educational system? Kindly help me to answer this! [2]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? With help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers

Human civilization has shapely evolved. One of the most significant driving factors is technology. Though sometimes, the technology could lead the learners to a wrong direction, it still plays an important role in the every aspect of life; especially for developing educational system. For me, I agree with the writer on help of technology because not only should it provide a quick access to the required information, but also it can connect users to the entire world with less effort compared to the past. Let me lay down my reasons

First of all, technology allows students to have a quick access to their required information or sometimes to have a hand-on experience. For example, in the past, it takes many days to travel across the country to have a site visit on a historical structure, but since the transportation technology have been developed; people can travel easier and experienced some things that have not recorded in the book.

In addition, technology connects the learners to a huge archive of information through a global network called internet. Definitely, having internet installed is rewarding as the internet allows the users to surf all kind of information by using just their fingers. At this point, they can get into a huge archive of information as opposed to the ones who use just only book will take more time to get their stuffs

All in all, technology has played an important part of human life such as education. It can provide both quick access and large information resources to the learners. However, the learners should be aware that some information is just a fake, so searching for your required information along your consideration is recommended.

humangun

Apr 23, 2015

Writing Feedback / Is It Better to Change Job Than to Do The Same Job? [4]

Changing job is a common trend in today's life as .some people argue that it is a better way for people to get a new experiences and to get a better income. However, others claim that doing the same job during their lifetime is more comfortable than adapting [themselves ]to new [working] atmosphere. Nevertheless, I would argue that changing job is the best choice for people so as to run out from boredom.

Doing the same job sometimes makes people feel bored;[most of the people want to get a higher income that their present job cannot offer even they have worked for the company in such a long time] want a higher payment as they already work for long time in this job. Therefore, some people believe that changing job is a viable solution for these problems. Firstly, by changing job, people may get new experiences such as new friends, new atmosphere, and new life. These experiences may create challenge that can make people enjoy doing their jobs and do not feel bored. The second is [that] they may have a better income. By taking a chance to get a new job, people possibly earn a higher amount of money as they enjoy working in new environment and it causes them to work productively.

In contrast, some people argue that changing job can bring difficulties to people [themselves] since they have to adapt in new environment. For example, most people move to other jobs [another] to experience new environment and to earn much [more] money. However, they forget about adaptation process [workplace-adapting process] they may face. As a result, they are not ready to deal with high-pressured work [job] and then [this] cause them to feel more stressful. Therefore, changing job can disadvantage people in line of the [workplace-adapting process].

To conclude, even changing job can cause people more stressfull in the adaptation process, I believe that the benefits of this trend outshine the disadvantage since people may experience the difficulties of changing job only in a short time. Therefore, it is imperative for people to change their job to escape from their boredoms in previous place.

Hello Stacy H,

I have an excellent idea. I believe that you will be able to chalk any test up easily .However, there are a few grammar mistakes needed to be improved; I already wrote in red.

Cheers

JohnC

humangun

Apr 21, 2015

Writing Feedback / The government should spend money on public services, but investment in the arts is not unnecessary [3]

People hold different ideas on government [...] that investment in the arts is unnecessary. [ Alternative way to say last two sentence" While I agree that the government should rather spend money on public services than on art stuffs ; such as music and theatre". [PLUS],let me explain more detail in the following paragraph ]

... transports to all people regardless of [their] income. In other words, public services [can] ensure that everyone have[has] equal access to ...
... on a regular basis by[the ] government investment, quality ...
This is the reason why the rate of death [you can frankly say "dead rate or mortality rate"] caused by illness in Canada is lower than other countries.

... for that reason funding for [in] arts like preserving heritages.

... besides arts also should be"another factor to be concerned" [I added some big words to make your sentence more attractive;] concerned.

Dear Jenny,

You have a great idea on writing an essay. I believe that you will get top TOFLE scores soon. However , there are still some mistakes; mostly caused by GRAMMAR.I have also put some alternative sentence to make your sentence more clearer. My suggestion is "if you still have time before the exam, please take your time to revise your grammar.

Cheer
John

humangun

Apr 5, 2015

Writing Feedback / Some green-heart people might oppose the factory, since it can bring some damage. [NEW]

A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory?Explain your position.

Some green-heart people might oppose the factory, since a can cause air and noise pollution, mental illness, and traffic jam.
However, some community; especially rural area, need to be developed to catch up with an urban community. One of the main solutions is that building a factory and the reasons for the action would be described in the following paragraphs

The first reason is a large factory can develop the community. The technologies can support a wide range of things such as education, transportation, and information technologies. For example, in my home town there are a small number of teacher compared to the number of students; teacher to students ratio : 1 /50, so it is quite hard for the students in the back low to pay attention to a class plus the studying material is not up to date . A year ago, one sugar factory was established .Federal law in Thailand defines the factory built near the town must make an annual contribution to the society the school. Therefore, in every year, the nearby factory schools can get much good studying material such as tutorial video, good books, and sometimes computers.

The second reason is the factory can create a number of jobs to the community. This is because a large factory requires a great number of employees to run his plants. In addition, all of the jobs in a factory are well-paid jobs; people can reconsider a new job which offers a good paid. There is one province in Thailand; Rayong.This province is far from town. Most of the people were fisher mans and were living in really tough life. But since 1991, a large industrial site was established; it created many new jobs and brought wealth to the community.

In conclusion, thanks to these two main principle reasons mentioned above caused by building a factory, the community ;especially for rural area, has significantly improved and be able to catch up with other large developed communities.