Dawn01
Jul 30, 2015
Undergraduate / Mexican and Arabian - two best friends. Diversity from a different perspective. College APP [4]
Hi, krobledo226 again !!
Actually, I focused on grammar because I felt that it's exhausting to consider the meaning for a paper that has lapses in quality and contains a lot of structure, style, grammar and spelling mistakes. It was hard for me to understand the message that you want to deliver due to the amount of mistakes. But, let's say that it is a first draft. You have to improve your style and grammar because rhetoric is important in Common App Essays. So, this is your first step. Ok, let's forget language, I wonder that your essay is broad generalization of yor life and experience. What I recommend is that you engage in a deep analyze and treat details smoothly. You have to paint a unique picture of your background and experience because Application Officers put their interest on what is special on you and what differentiates you from other Hispanic.
I hope this helped a bit !!
Good luck !
P.S: each thread is reserved for one essay. It's better to concentrate on one rather then to quicken with little quality.
Hi, krobledo226 again !!
Actually, I focused on grammar because I felt that it's exhausting to consider the meaning for a paper that has lapses in quality and contains a lot of structure, style, grammar and spelling mistakes. It was hard for me to understand the message that you want to deliver due to the amount of mistakes. But, let's say that it is a first draft. You have to improve your style and grammar because rhetoric is important in Common App Essays. So, this is your first step. Ok, let's forget language, I wonder that your essay is broad generalization of yor life and experience. What I recommend is that you engage in a deep analyze and treat details smoothly. You have to paint a unique picture of your background and experience because Application Officers put their interest on what is special on you and what differentiates you from other Hispanic.
I hope this helped a bit !!
Good luck !
P.S: each thread is reserved for one essay. It's better to concentrate on one rather then to quicken with little quality.