sid052
Sep 1, 2015
Graduate / Parents do what they saw and learned from their parents [5]
The sentence formation in your essay is very poor. I think you need to read a lot from newspaper, magazines or from any other source. The essay depending on the word limit must always start with an introduction of the issue about which you are writing like in this case you should have started as:
In the world in which we are living currently there are millions of things which we never heard of or don't know about them. In order to learn a new techniques we all need a person who can show or teach us how that work has to be done. So teacher is the most important person of anyone's life. He is helping you to understand the thing from basic to complicated to help you make your life comfortable. Parent are the first teacher of any person's life.
But are parent's the best teacher for a person i don't think so they are undoubtedly the first teacher but definitely not the best. Being a teacher is not easy. Its not a cake walk. Being a teacher means that you are able to see the thinks from some one else perspective (from Kids perspective). You have make a kid understand a phenomenon which he has never heard before so it is quite difficult.
Most parents don't focus on the strengths of the kid they do as they are they have seen others doing or as their parents did to them which might not be perfect for a kid because every individual is different and you need a different approach for every one.
You can elaborate it further depending on the word limit.
The points that you have mentioned are good but you are able to convey you thoughts properly.
The sentence formation in your essay is very poor. I think you need to read a lot from newspaper, magazines or from any other source. The essay depending on the word limit must always start with an introduction of the issue about which you are writing like in this case you should have started as:
In the world in which we are living currently there are millions of things which we never heard of or don't know about them. In order to learn a new techniques we all need a person who can show or teach us how that work has to be done. So teacher is the most important person of anyone's life. He is helping you to understand the thing from basic to complicated to help you make your life comfortable. Parent are the first teacher of any person's life.
But are parent's the best teacher for a person i don't think so they are undoubtedly the first teacher but definitely not the best. Being a teacher is not easy. Its not a cake walk. Being a teacher means that you are able to see the thinks from some one else perspective (from Kids perspective). You have make a kid understand a phenomenon which he has never heard before so it is quite difficult.
Most parents don't focus on the strengths of the kid they do as they are they have seen others doing or as their parents did to them which might not be perfect for a kid because every individual is different and you need a different approach for every one.
You can elaborate it further depending on the word limit.
The points that you have mentioned are good but you are able to convey you thoughts properly.