Undergraduate / UIUC-Transfer Essay- Talk about your motivation and how will the university help fulfill your goals [2]

Hey, it is Johnny! I really want some advice on this transfer essay, about grammar, the flow, how to make it better, anything will do.

Topic: In an essay of 300 words or less, explain your motivation to transfer from your current university to Illinois and how your academic interests and professional goals will be fulfilled in your intent program of study.

I always believe in "Practice is the the sole criterion for testing truth". In which sense, I insists that college students should spend an appropriate time during vacation in an internship program. Such is the nature of Chinese education system, a lot of students usually ignore what can really kindle their interests even before they choose a major. I start as an Environmental Engineering student and spend a significance time to work in a mechanical engineering company outside the class.

It's not long after I started my intern than I found that, their main product, a new generation of electronic propulsion vessels would be way much better if they could equip a sophisticated remote control system. Intending not to waste my good ideas, I proposed it to my boss and he recommended me to work with the computer apartment. It's the very first time I ever be able to really work on a coding program, which, quoting my original words, was fabulous. It's like we were brought up to eat certain type of food and we stick to them all our lives, until one day you found that you don't have to do so. I would have never felt so desperate to understand everything about this major. However, my current university would not really satisfy my needs to gain a sound grounding in computer majors, as an university specialized in agriculture , which is the original motivation to transfer to Illinois.

I firmly believe it's never too late to do anything. In the light of this statement, I think following my interests and passions will never lead me wrong and all I wish for myself is, to stay hungry, stay foolish.

Undergraduate / Transfer Essay: Meaningful interest to complete the application. [4]

Hi, everyone, this is my Purdue transfer essay! I appreciate any help and please feel free to give me feedback about the grammar, the structure, the logic, or the sentences to be more concise! Thanks in advance!

Topic: Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.

Word limit: 250-650

Essay:
Some people prefer seats by the window, as they think looking out of the window helps spread their nerves and broaden their minds. One day, when I was sitting in front of my desk and looked out of the window, I saw a pretty bird flying back to a clumsy yet colorful handmade borrow, which reminded me of my childhood borrow. Memories flash back and I saw the nine-year-old me sitting in the yard of my childhood house and trying to build a burrow, of which the excitements can still be tasted, like it never fades.

Some people are lucky to have found their interest early in life, but I have found my interest of applied physics through countless attempts.
When I first went to school at 6 and learned about science, I found it so fascinating to find ways to use them. I still remember my first design is an auto-filling drinking bottle for my bunny as a demonstration of the siphon phenomenon - a pipe filled with water introduced it from a higher tank. As the position of water in the bottle decreased, the pressure would push the water from the tank inside the bottle until it was full. I admired the display for a couple of days and my chest was swelled with feelings of satisfy.

I believe it is the moment of enlightenment, which leads me to identify my interest. Such is the feature of Chinese education, that students spend tons of time in studying but minor of it in using the knowledge. Bored of the limitations in applying my knowledge, I enrolled in an education program to teach high school students physics for a winter.

One good thing about being a teacher is when you are solving puzzles of the students you are actually using your knowledge. One day, a student came to me asking about the Ideal gas Law. To illustrate the point, instead of drawing pictures on the paper, I brought over a toothpaste. It was so vivid and easy to understand the law, witnessing the toothpaste squirting out of the pipe as the volume decreased which increased the pressure and pushed them out. Not only the student left with satisfy smile on his face, but the emptiness I felt in study was filled with sense of accomplishment.

That is the most important thing that I am interested in applied physics. Everything, every object that we encounter in life can be related to physics knowledge we have learned in school. I am quite fond of the connections between life and knowledge, which are the connections of reality and theory. Steve Jobs has talked about connecting the dots on one of his speeches, about which I find it is concise. People tend to regard it as one of the most important moments in their life, at which they find the significance of studying and everything they have done. It is the moment that I know I can't spend my life reciting the tedious names of the sewage treatment processes, or working on the names and definitions over and over again without getting to know how to use it.

When I was 18, I read a quote that went, "A small bite of your courage can turn your life around". For the first time in my life, I want to do something without being utilitarian. I want to major in applied physics as I like it from the bottom of my heart, but not for the exam we need to pass, or easiness to graduate. The sun rises from the horizon and light up the sky. I look out of the window and picture myself walking through the gate of Purdue, which is so real that urges me to pull up my courage to seek for the opportunities to develop my interest, because it is going to be a dawn in my life.

Undergraduate / Statement of Purpose for transferring to UIUC as an undergraduate student withless than 300 words [4]

I am currently a junior student at South China Agricultural University. Over the past two and a half years, I gained exposure to a wide variety of cutting-edge innovations in science and engineering through both course learning and extracurricular reading. As a result, I realized my true passion lies with robotics, smart device and artificial intelligence.

My future career goal is to become a creative engineer who masters both hardware and software expertise, and makes ground-breaking inventions. Current successful technological advances mostly revolve around virtual aspects of human life, such as social network and Big Data analysis. But in the long run, new and automatic machines will be in greater need since they can connect us more directly to the physical world.

Despite my positive study experience so far, my current institution is not strong enough in engineering, computer science and other foundational science subjects. This is why I decide to move on to another university. After going through a number of choices, I feel UIUC will be a perfect fit for me. First, I am deeply attracted to the impeccable reputation in research and education of UIUC. Second, your undergraduate curriculums strike a perfect balance between depth and breadth, offering a wide spectrum of courses that meet my learning needs. Moreover, faculty members are all distinguished scholars in various disciplines, ensuring high teaching quality in relevant courses. I also hope to take advantage of UIUC's rich research resources and implement my knowledge practically through experimental projects. Finally, I am very interested in pursuing a master or doctor degree at UIUC in the future. Therefore, earning the bachelor's degree in UIUC will provide coherence and preparation for that goal as well as familiarize me with the research work of potential graduate advisors. Thank you for your consideration.