UvyL26
May 31, 2016
Writing Feedback / It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. [3]
This is my comment:
slightly improvement:
- canbe caused (cause) terrific
- Theater is a public place which can be caused terrific and turbulent around the surrounding environmental ( terrific and turbulent? I am not clear with this sentence )
These activities and places comfort the living of the people around (I can't find a verb in this sentence)
The cost of our house increases more than 5 times (simple present) and we sold our house more expensive than compare the 2 years ago (simple past).(imbalance sentence)
Good luck for the next writing!
This is my comment:
slightly improvement:
- can
- Theater is a public place which can be caused terrific and turbulent around the surrounding environmental ( terrific and turbulent? I am not clear with this sentence )
These activities and places comfort the living of the people around (I can't find a verb in this sentence)
The cost of our house increases more than 5 times (simple present) and we sold our house more expensive than compare the 2 years ago (simple past).(imbalance sentence)
Good luck for the next writing!