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Posts by hanzy48
Name: Ngoc Huong Le
Joined: Jun 5, 2016
Last Post: Jun 6, 2016
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School: Hutech University

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hanzy48   
Jun 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / SUPERMAN VS BATMAN: DAWN OF JUSTICE AND AMERICAN CAPITAIN: CIVIL WAR - TWO FILMS THAT YOU HAVE SEEN [2]

Hello, my next essay is a compare and contrast essay. Help me to find out and correct my errors!!

Thank you! ^~^
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"SUPERMAN VS BATMAN: DAWN OF JUSTICE" AND "AMERICAN CAPITAIN: CIVIL WAR"

I have seen many kinds of films but science fiction is my favorite. About a month ago, I enjoyed Superman vs Batman: Dawn of Justice and Capitain America: Civil war, which belong to Marvel Cinematic Universe- A famous sci-fi series film. These films are amazing and memorable for me. When I compare them, they have some things in common, but they obviously have differences that make them special from each other.

There are some reasons why many audiences comment that two films are similar. Both films focus in on the theme of consequences. In Dawn of Justice, Superman and Batman saved human from evils but they did not receive the support. This is similar with the plot of Civil war, the destruction caused by the Avengers when they protected human, have led to the government pushing for political oversight of the world's superheroes. Second, Dawn of Justice and Civil War also tell us the story about the fight between two main characters. Lex Lauthor, a baddie, succeeded into manipulating Superman and Batman into fighting each other. Lex is the same as Baron Zemo in Civil War because Baron is the factor causing the civil war between Capitain and Iron Man. For me, those similarities make me slightly unsatisfied but I still love them both.

Despite their similarities, these films are very different. Civil War has more superheroes. There are Black Window, War Machine, Black Panther, The Vision, and Spider Man in team Iron Man while team Capitain has Hawkeye, Sharon Carter, Falcon, Bucky Barnes, Ant-man, Scarlet Witch. In Dawn of Justice, Wonder Woman is the only superhero who reconciled Superman to Batman. Besides, Civil War has a happier ending because nobody died, although several of the characters are now fugitives. On the other hand, Dawn of Justice has a sad ending as Superman "died" while killing Doomsday. I felt very sad when I saw this ending scene but it is what makes this film become special.

In short, these are the two sci-fi films I love. In my opinion, both are interesting, amazing and meaningful. Although Dawn of Justice and Civil War have the similar story, they still have special differences.
hanzy48   
Jun 5, 2016
Writing Feedback / NARRATIVE essay: A MISTAKE THAT TAUGHT ME AN IMPORTANT LESSON [3]

Hi guys, I have to write a three-paragraph essay about above topic. Help me!
p/s: I want to put a quote into the hook but I don't know how because it is an unknown quote. So I just write this quote, Can you help me rewrite this hook?? ^~^

Thank you for reading!
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MY EVIL IN LOVE

"Although fate present the circumstances, how you react depends on your character." This quote is very consistent with the ending of my love story. I fell in love with my boyfriend 4 years ago. We were always far from each other because We studied in different cities. Despite the geographical distance, our love was still strong and we always talked about our beautiful future. However, this beautiful future could not come to since I caused an unnecessary mistake. I thought that the mistake led our relationship aside from our plan.

In the early days of June, there would not have been any problems if he had answered me as usual. I called him many times but I just received the answer that his phone was busy. I waited and began being sulky. I sent messages to ask him whom he had talked to and why he had made a long-call like this. He explained and apologized for not answering my calls. Nevertheless, the more apologies he said, the angrier I got. I really did not know why I behaved to cruel like this while I wanted to forgive him. I used harsh words to criticize him that broke his limit. He said, "Everyone has a limit, me too. I tried to apologize all the time but you refused all. I love you but I can not stand it anymore!". Then, he did not answer any messages from me and not contact with me.

After thinking about what he said, I realized how terrible I was. Whenever we were sulky with each other, I always got angrier and he was always the one who said sorry first. I recognized that I should learn how to keep clam and also keep our relationship. But it was too late, we broke up. This is the price I have to pay for my bad manner in love.
hanzy48   
Jun 5, 2016
Scholarship / The Day My Dream Became Reality [6]

Hi,

First, I think this essay too simple: simple plot, simple sentences.
then, about the structure of your essay. with 250 word you should have written a three-paragraph essay.
you don't have to spent lots of time to the intro in the short like this. :)

Good luck!

help with mine =>> essayforum.com/grammar/help-teach-put-unknown-quote-69240/
hanzy48   
Jun 5, 2016
Grammar, Usage / How to write intext citations for publications by NGO's where no author is mentioned ? [6]

Help me!! Teach me HOW TO PUT AN UNKNOWN QUOTE IN A ESSAY

I want to write this quote "Although fate presents the circumstances, how you react depends on your character" in the Hook of my Narrative essay. But I don't know how because it's an unknown quote.

And in the hook i want to said this quote is very consistent with the ending of my love story (what i will write about in the body).

Thank you so much for your useful answers!!!!
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