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Ashkan1363

Jul 18, 2016

Writing Feedback / In about 140 words write a paragraph about the importance of doing exercises [4]

1.help us avoid many diseases such as cancer, heart attack,and high blood pressure.
2.when you write a research paper try to use passive sentence

I found this two error.

Ashkan1363

Jul 9, 2016

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Results number of vistors to Ashdown Museum [7]

The charts give information about visitor satisfaction rates ~~among~~Vs five types of feeling.

Overall, visitors ~~of before~~ prior refurbishment are ~~much~~ more than those of after refurbishment. (It increase 18,000 people.)not make sense.
The majority of visitors are dissatisfied accounting for 40%:40 percent of majority of visitors are dissatisfied

Ashkan1363

Jul 8, 2016

Writing Feedback / Is children education a difficult task now because of the distraction of "evil high-tech devices"? [4]

Children is plural : becomes =>become
Suggestion:that people ignore that these technology=> people ignore the fact that....

Ashkan1363

Jul 7, 2016

Student Talk / How much can students earn during summers? [9]

It depends on what you are going to do and which states you are leaving.The minimum wage starts from 7.25 before tax. it means you will recive 6.75 after tax.but if you find job in restaurant or any place that they pay you cash you dont have to pay tax.Some student get paid internship and the payment is nice. I get pait 20 $ per hour pluse hotel and lunch during my internship.

Ashkan1363

Jul 7, 2016

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 (Practice) Number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents [4]

Hi
In 2005, visit to Australia by Japanese reaching with 12 million people :2005 is past but you used present tense.
In 2005,around 12 million people visited Australia.

Overall, visitors of East countries were much more than those of west countries.
.visitor from east countries but still is not make sense

It is clear that the number of visitors rose gradually to about 10 million people in 1975 and 30 million people in 2005

The graph indicates that the number of visitors in 1975 ,about 10 million people,gradually grew to 30 million people in 2005

The line graph shows the number of overseas ...
The line graph shows the number of overseas residents in Australia from 1975 to 2005.The table compares six countries in terms of the number of visitors.

I am not consider my self good writer but I think other people may help you more

Ashkan1363

Jul 4, 2016

Research Papers / Cracks description. Fracture surface and stereoscope image. [4]

Thank you,I appreciate your help

Ashkan1363

Jul 1, 2016

Research Papers / Cracks description. Fracture surface and stereoscope image. [4]

Hi would you correct my paragraph .I appreciate your help

As received condition of part is shown in Figure 1. The section was torch cut from side wall of truck body of 793F. The part is marked with "MUESTRA Para analisis" on the surface. Figure XXXX to XXX show fracture surface of each crack at high magnification. Each crack arbitrarily labelled by numbers. Figure XXXX and XXXX shows stereoscope image of crack number 3 and 2. For crack number 3, crack initiated at center of picture and propagated toward upper right side of picture. For crack number 2, it is initiated at right side of picture and propagated toward left side of image. For crack number 1, the propagation direction is present but crack initiation is absent.