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Name: Danielle Cartwright
Joined: Jul 27, 2016
Last Post: Aug 15, 2018
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Mochachii   
Aug 15, 2018
Scholarship / KGSP-U - Study plan to Improve English and Korean speaking abilities required for University [3]

I'm confident in my English speaking abilities, and Korean fascinates me



I'm applying for the KGSP-U scholarship this year and one of the requirement is an essay briefly speaking about your plans to improve your foreign language skills such as Korean and English. Please read and let me know what you think. Also feel free to leave ideas on what to add and take out.

As a native of a predominantly English speaking country, I am very confident in my English speaking abilities. From the time I was born to now, I've been perfecting my skill each day. Learning different languages is a hobby of mine. I've always been passionate about learning different languages and cultures. From Spanish to Sign Language I've studied them all at one point. However, no language has fascinated me like Korean has. Korean is a beautiful language that I've been studying on my own for the past 2 years. Learning a language like Korean is an amazing process, and every stage of it brings forth new challenges that I am willing to take. Like most languages, it takes time to learn and even after learning you can always improve. If given the chance to study in South Korea, there are a variety of ways I can improve my Korean by doing things I already do on a regular basis. Things such as reading Korean textbooks, novels, newspapers, studying with native speakers, using Korean SNS, watching Korean TV shows and listening to Korean music. Upon graduation, I have plans to teach Korean in my own country to those who want to learn. I plan to continue exchanging languages with Korean speakers as well. Teaching them English and having them teach me Korean. I will always be learning something new, improving and perfecting what I already know and teaching those interested in learning long after I complete my studies in Korea.
Mochachii   
Aug 15, 2018
Writing Feedback / IELTS writing task 1 Description of a town centre and making comparsion after a development plan [3]

put forward recently,in add a space between the comma and in.
Add a space between Currently, the.
Mostly just spacing issues between the punctuations and words Spacing is important. Be mindful of that.

"Currently,..." doesn't sound right to me.
I would say. "... of development is surrounding of the main road" or "The majority of development is happening around the main road" or something along the lines of that.
Mochachii   
Nov 29, 2017
Scholarship / David Strangway was a visionary who helped pioneer educational change and reform across Canada. [2]

Hiyah Everyone Can someone read my three scholarship essays to make sure everything is in tip-top condition? Thank you so much

David Strangway was a visionary who helped pioneer educational change and reform across Canada. What is your passion and how will it shape your vision for the future? (max 300 words)

the human mind and behavior



My passion lies in the scientific study of the human mind and behavior. I have always yearned to learn psychology more specifically Child Psychology. Child Psychology is a rather unique and complex branch of psychology. It deals with not only how children grow mentally but, physically, and emotionally as well. The mind of a child in itself is unique but also extremely fragile making it easy to influence. The number of people being diagnosed with some form of a mental illness is rising at an alarming rate, most being children and teens. Each year that number grows because society tends to overlook mental illness. Hence why child psychology is so important. A child's emotions will determine who they become. Their mental state will shape their future. My vision of the future is one where the number of people suffering from a mental disorder has decreased even in the slightest number. Signs of most lifetime mental disorders can be present from childhood, however many children with mental disorders are not getting treatment. Their disorder is often dismissed as a phase, bad attitude or them just being lazy when it could be the start of something very dangerous. Once they become an adult it becomes harder to treat their disorder.If signs of a mental disorder can be found and treated from childhood, it could drastically decrease a large number of people suffering from a mental disorder in their adulthood protecting not only the individual but also the community from those who suffer from more dangerous disorders such as Schizophrenia. In short, I wish to guide children and help them to grow mentally and emotionally, ensuring that as adults they have a healthy mindset so that they can have a healthy life.

one essay at one time please
Mochachii   
Jul 27, 2016
Undergraduate / "Blessed is the influence of one true, loving human soul on another" - my father influence on me [3]

Can you guys read this and tell me what I should change, add, replace??

George Eliot once said "Blessed is the influence of one true, loving human soul on another". I truly believe that everyone has been influenced by someone to pursue a certain career or to follow a certain path in life. I have been influenced by many things. From famous artists to magnificent inventors, brilliant scholars, majestic wildlife and the breathtaking beauty of nature. However, my greatest influence has always been my father. Though both of my parents are very supportive, it didn't take long to realize what an extraordinary influence my father has been on my life. My father is a hardworking, optimistic man of great integrity and it is because him that I strive to follow my dreams of becoming a chef. He would always stand by side, encouraging me to do the best that I could, and giving me the pep talk of the century whenever I felt defeated. I always loved to cook but, my family has never been wealthy. This fact alone is what detoured me from doing anything that would require too much money as I did not want to add unnecessary strain on my father. However, knowing the passion I have for cooking my father always encouraged me to find to find recipes and to prepare them despite the cost. He would sacrifice his last, saving every single stray penny he had to buy the ingredients, tools and equipment needed to nurture my ability. All whiles keeping a smile quoting his favorite motto "God will always make a way". This furthered my love for culinary arts tremendously, leading me to select Hospitality, Food and Nutrition as my main elective in both middle and high school. It is purely because of his positive influence that I am applying to college today. His optimistic outlook on life, consideration for others, and his will to never give up are what inspires the power within me. Pushing me to want to go to college, to want to become a chef, to want to be the very best version of myself that I can be. If it has not been for my father's hard work, support and encouragement I would have not been where I am today. Regardless of other people that have impacted me to take the first step in pursuing a career in culinary arts, my father will always be the most influential person in my life.
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