Posts by saskia98 [Suspended]

saskia98

Aug 26, 2016

Writing Feedback / The Roles of Parents and Teachers in Controlling Diet for Children [5]

Hello, Hirani :)
I just want to say that maybe it'd be better for you if you provided us the question at the first place so I can compare your writing answer to the questions asked.

Thank you and good luck :)

saskia98

Aug 25, 2016

Writing Feedback / Several Introductions of Writing Task 2 [4]

Thank you so much for your feedback:) I highly appreciate it :)

saskia98

Aug 25, 2016

Writing Feedback / Two earthquakes were happened in Myanmar and Italy and they are not connected to each other [3]

Hello, Naoki. I will try to help you with your grammar. My grammar is not really good but I will try to correct the one that I can.

Two earthquakes (which) were happened in Myanmar and Italy ~~and did not connect with~~ (were not connected to) each other because both earthquakes ~~was~~ (were) just caused (by) different ~~fault~~ (I think it should be 'causes'), according to John Bellini ...

*I think you should understand that if you want to use 2 verbs in a sentence, you have to put a conjunction.

Thank you and good luck :)

saskia98

Aug 25, 2016

Writing Feedback / Examples how to make good introduction for writing task 2 [2]

Hello, I just wanna help you with something that I can. (pardon me)

and I will be focused on some certain sentences.

Child labours are not uncommon matter(s) in some countries
... a certain view that children ~~since~~ (I think it should be 'from') early stage ~~have to~~ need (you can directly go with 'need' without having to use 'have to') an experience of working.

... do not need to work before ~~graduating~~ (having graduated from) their study.

Thank you and good luck :)

saskia98

Aug 25, 2016

Writing Feedback / Several Introductions of Writing Task 2 [4]

"As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on a daily basis, are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distances.

Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?"

Nowadays, global trade is a common thing for countries to do in order to exchange goods from one to another. However, this trend may give many disadvantages especially for the developing countries.

"In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience.

Discuss both opinions and give your opinion."

It's a common thing for children these days to go working to get paid. There are many different reasons why they decided to go to work. But no matter what the reason is, children are not supposed to work under a certain age.

"Unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood, or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

Unpaid community service is commonly provided by students at the university as a program of their organizations. This kind of service has been giving great impacts to our society and teaching young generations to take care of their surroundings. There are therefore several reasons why high schools should adopt this service as their school programs.