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mehbub   
Sep 9, 2016
Writing Feedback / Learner's interest and enjoyment should be the ultimate factors while enrolling to further education [3]

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


There is ever demanding observable fact of preferring career oriented courses, such as software engineering and information technology, among the tertiary level aspirants. It is often agreed this is a positive development while others oppose and refers it will lead to adverse ramifications. This essay agrees that learner's interest and enjoyment should be the ultimate factors while enrolling to further education college rather accomplishment. Both viewpoints will be discussed in this essay and hence fortify the above statement.

It is evident that learning with gratification and keep amused own self will open the avenues for greater achievement in future. Moreover, being relaxed and more motivated will act as a catalyst to bring interesting vision from the learners. It is therefore agreed that while enrolling in graduation program, student must follow their inner voice. Professionals such as sports icons or photographers are a prime example, where they ensure their paycheck as well as appreciation from others.

Admittedly, many disagree and feel that learner's must be smart enough while selecting courses because of two fold reasons. To begin with, profession oriented programs may be the precursor of obtaining high salaried career to a student and ensures protected life thereby. Furthermore, they can easily compensate the financial debts that occur due to high tuition fee, a very common circumstance these days. Despite these, being dropped out from universities due to not getting pleasure strongly embodied the idea that students must be vigilant while following the shortcut footstep of achieving goal.

By far the conclusion, while the benefits of enjoyment should be the vocal point to enroll in third level education program, some still feels that student should go for functional subject. However, as long as students are listening to their hearts to learn something with ecstasy, I certainly believe, success will follow their footprint.

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mehbub   
Sep 9, 2016
Writing Feedback / [IELTS Writing Task1- letter] The cafeteria is planned for closure [4]

Hi, kenchowcn

Pardon me, I mistaken your name in above post.It was a typo.

One more focus point regarding the correct way of ending .

As this is a Formal Type letter and we should know the surname of Manager, so i would prefer to end with something like below.

Yours Sincerely
Ken

mehbub   
Sep 9, 2016
Writing Feedback / [IELTS Writing Task1- letter] The cafeteria is planned for closure [4]

Hi Kim,

I have two feedback for your letter. Correct me if I am wrong.

To begin with, its consists of 200+ words which not only kill your valuable time but also create provisions of more grammatical errors.

Furthermore, I did not find anything related with the segment to describe ' - state the reason for it not being in use.' You may lose some marks in 'task completion section'.

Happy Writing.
mehbub   
Sep 9, 2016
Writing Feedback / WT 2: Discuss Both Views: Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important [2]

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


There is an ever increasing observable fact of justifying human based on their physical appearance and attire, such as how we look or how we dress, by family members, friends or even colleagues. It is often agreed that this is a positive development whilst other oppose and refers it will lead to adverse ramifications. This essay agrees that integrity and merit should be the ultimate factors of scrutinize people rather presentation. Both viewpoints will be analyzed here and will fortify the thesis statement.

It is evident that majority of people are showing unconscious favoritism towards trendy outfitters. Moreover, there is also a growing hype among mass, such as, others are being outperformed by these stylish people in every aspects of life. It is therefore agreed that appearance has a strong correlation with receiving positive vibe from counterparts at first look. Attending in funeral with appropriate dress is a prime example, where others will think that the person belongs in mourning.

However, many disagree and feel that sincerity and performance should be the key of one's identification due to following two fold reasons. To begin with, person's caliber is the most effective virtue to accomplish certain task. Furthermore, a well mannered people can act as a catalyst to provide sharing and caring environment among mates. Therefore, this essay disagreed that nicely attire should not be the crucial factor to judge human personality. For instance, fully groomed but less knowledgeable employee will certainly produce unexpected result in work.

By far the conclusion, while inhabitants can easily attract by latest fashion, majority still believe that people should be distinct based on their capabilities. However, as long as we are respectful towards the achievement, significance of merit will always remain upper hand.

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mehbub   
Sep 9, 2016
Writing Feedback / The way of people dressing is not the most important aspect [5]

Hi ekalamarsyari11,

below is my conclusion,

By far the conclusion, while inhabitants can easily attract by latest fashion, majority still believe that people should be distinct based on their capabilities. However, as long as we are respectful towards the achievement, significance of merit will always remain upper hand.
mehbub   
Sep 8, 2016
Writing Feedback / The way of people dressing is not the most important aspect [5]

Hi ekalamarsyari11,

I am following the below introduction structure for Discuss and opinion essay.

Introduction
Sentence 1- Paraphrase Question
There is an ever growing observable fact of justifying human by their physical appearance, such as how we look and how we dress, by family members, friends or even colleagues.

Sentence 2- State Both Points of View
It is often agreed that this is the right way whilst others oppose and refers it will lead to adverse ramifications.

Sentence 3- Thesis Statement
This essay agrees that the way one looks has no bearing on the job performance and everyone should be judged solely on his/her merits.

Sentence 4- Outline Sentence
Both viewpoints will be discussed in this essay and hence, will fortify the above statement.
mehbub   
Aug 31, 2016
Writing Feedback / In this consumer driven economy, owning redundant possessions is a commonly practiced custom [7]

Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent from having this problem?

In this consumer driven economy, owning redundant possessions is a commonly practiced custom by the human beings. Even in the low income group of people, this is evident. Being up-to-the-minute and status symbol in the pursuit of social contest along with influences of commercials are the major factors behind this norm.

To begin with, current age group is mostly focused towards the upcoming fashion that varies from latest gadgets to hottest outfits. This market group can easily be accessible through social or electronic media as well as online marketplace. Early bird booking of smart phone gadgets like 'Apple Iphone 7' or 'Samsung Galaxy' can be taken as an example where the majority buyers are actually own smart devices already. Moreover, attachment of celebrities with the trendy products also manipulates people from all income groups. For instances , female heroin's are usually seen as a brand ambassador of face whitening cream which easily attracts people from all around the world although mass knows that is not going to help them. Hence, the above makes it clear that sometimes people are exercising needless shopping only they are influenced by friends or relatives or even by social icons.

In order to stem this behavior, I firmly believe that appropriate education from social institutes like, family, school or community center can play a vital role to control this conduct. If juveniles as well as adults can get knowledge of real value of money as well as balanced lifestyle with career goals, then things can improve rapidly. Even, the Government can take initiative like imposing hefty taxes on luxurious products that I believe will positively correlate the less buying of unimportant stuffs.

As a concluding statement, I want to restate that adverse impact of advertisement as well as continuous demand of being fashionable opens the avenue to own less required belongings. To control this behavior, all kinds of social institutes should come forward and educating the society which can act as a catalyst to improve the situation.