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Name: Aysha Sahibzada
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Aysha13   
Nov 2, 2016
Scholarship / Leadership as a physician. Essay for Chevening scholarship, need suggestions and correction. [2]

Suggestions and corrections will be very beneficial and highly appreciated. thank you

Chevening is looking for individuals that will be future leaders or influencers in their home country. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer. (50-500 max)

At times leadership can be affected by birth order. Being the eldest child in maternal and paternal side of my family, all my cousins and siblings are younger than me. Growing up in a close knit family definitely had an impact on my upbringing. To be a good role model was a responsibility that came naturally to me, I had to be dedicated and passionate towards my goals and with strong will power and hard work it became possible to reach towards them. I did well academically and entered medical school where I managed to get an all paid tuition fee scholarship based on my merits. I was extremely proud to have some kind of influence since my younger brother and two of my cousins chose to enter medical school, and are on their way of becoming future doctors.

During medical school was the time my leadership qualities were greatly enhanced. In 5th year I was appointed as the organiser of the monthly motivational speech by well-known speakers mainly in the healthcare sector. I remember during organising one such event where a well-known surgeon was chosen to talk about his journey towards success, cancelled at the last day due to an emergency. Being the organiser I panicked at first, then instead of cancelling I decided to arrange someone from our university. I appointed two students to search for any of our professors who are free and willing to attend the event. Luckily the emergency medicine professor agreed as I requested and explained him my situation. It turned out to be a very entrancing event as he presented several fascinating cases for us. The success was a team effort and I made sure to listen to my team mates opinions, and valued there contribution greatly. I divided the workload depending on everyone's strength and interest. This had led to many successful events under my organisation.

We as physicians practice the art of medicine by coordinating care. It is delivered via a team of caregivers, including nurses, phlebotomist, technicians, pharmacist and housekeepers- not solely physicians. Learning to lead is fundamental to being a successful clinician. But sometime being on the top of the chain automatically leads you to adapt a dysfunctional leadership style; based on giving orders. I have experienced it myself when I started working as a general physician in India. I believe I was able to bring a slight change over time in the working environment and the type of patient care that was being provided. A simple change to a more collaborative and team centred physician leadership style made a huge difference immediately. Asking lots of questions and fewer orders led my team to be involved in the whole process of patient care and provided the best treatment plan possible.

Seeking leadership opportunities and mentors in leadership positions poises us to lead. Chevening will be the ideal chance to polish, enrich and improve my leadership skills that are an essential part of my duty as a Physician.
Aysha13   
Oct 31, 2016
Writing Feedback / Bulgarian citizens who lived outside their country, based on school level [5]

hey,
i read your essay, hope my corrections and suggestions will be helpful.

the first paragraph seems good to me. just one correction :
Overall, the secondary education was the highest number of people who planned to go abroad during the three years.

in the 2nd paragraph i found the last sentence to be a bit confusing:
(In 2008, middle education degree ... Meanwhile, (...) were a slight rise from 18 to 19 percent. Next, it reached a peak at 32%. 160w)

since you were talking about the year 2008, but after meanwhile, u started talked about the previous years and then came back to 2008.
Aysha13   
Oct 30, 2016
Scholarship / Growing up abroad helped me build a good network. Networking skills essay for Chevening [4]

hi holt, thanks for pointing that out. i agree maybe its a very specific example of my networking skills. although i believe this was the most strongest example i had but mentioning the name of my colleague doesn't really seems possible. and even if i take her permission and mention her name do u think its enough for authentication purposes?

for now i have changed the content of my essay and wrote other examples of networking, please let me know if they are good enough or should i stick to my original example and contact my colleague for permission?

Aysha13   
Oct 30, 2016
Scholarship / Growing up abroad helped me build a good network. Networking skills essay for Chevening [4]

Chevening is looking for individuals with strong networking skills, who will engage ....

Being born and bought up in Saudi Arabia, then moving to India my home land in 2011 was a tremendous adjustment on my part. One of the advantages of growing up abroad that it helped me build a good network. Since Saudi Arabia has a large population of expats from all around the world, I grew up in a multi ethnic society. Connecting with people from different countries and culture, building and enduring mutually beneficial relationships enhanced my networking skills.

Professional networking and good communication skills plays an integral part in a physician's life. I learned its value when I started working as a general physician here in Lucknow, India. Once I had a patient who was assigned for a gall bladder removal surgery. He was working in Saudi Arabia and was back to homeland for his annual leave, which was due to an end in two days. Worried about how to proceed with his operation when he has to travel the next day and since his diagnosis was made late he did not have time to extend his vacation. That time I remembered one of my colleagues from Saudi Arabia, who happens to be a surgical resident now in one of the well-known hospitals there. I explained to the patient that if he agrees I would contact and request her to handle his case and guide him to the best and most affordable hospital for his surgery over there. Since the patient was delighted and ready for the opportunity, I made the call did the necessary arrangements and helped the patient receive his surgery in Saudi Arabia while I remain here in India. This was only made possible through networking skills.

I believe networking in my field is of crucial importance as meeting doctors from all around the world and from different specialities and backgrounds could be an essential step in climbing the career ladder as well as providing a holistic patient care. I'm highly committed in making and maintaining new connections by reaching out to people introducing myself and exchanging contacts for professional or personal interests usually through seminars, conferences and medical events.

Chevening scholarship would give me the perfect opportunity to expand and enrich my network through meeting other aspiring scholars and sharing our experiences together. It will be a privilege being part of the vibrant Chevening community to benefit and motivate each other towards reaching our goals and building a better future for our countries.
Aysha13   
Oct 27, 2016
Scholarship / The three university courses choice - Applying for Chevening Scholarship, need help with my essay! [11]

Hey Holt, i am so sorry for bugging you continuously with this essay of mine, but as i have changed the whole format like you said and edited everything its making me really worried. the time constrain is making me very nervous, i have to edit and correct the other 3 essays as well before deadline. i really appreciate your help, please continue giving your suggestion and corrections in all of them.

okay so i am posting my latest version below, i do have few questions regarding it tho.
- am i on the right track?
- now i have skipped this part completely (Since the living standards in India are improving [....] and service for greater welfare to my countrymen) the justification part about the need of dermatologist in my country. do u think i need to mention this? in a summarise way maybe?

lastly, its already 532 words! i still haven't written a conclusion yet which means again i need suggestion on editing this.

here you go.

The first two courses I have chosen are based on my avidity to specialise in dermatology. What intrigued me most was the fact that 'dermatology is an art of seeing'. It offers the possibility to make a diagnosis by sight without any further evidence or technological aids. My interest grew deeper during the internship year of medical school, when I worked as an intern in the dermatology rotation. It made me experience the clinical aspects of it, and I was fascinated by the fact that the field is so diverse and multi-faceted. You get to see everything - from harmless rashes to life threatening illnesses.

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Aysha13   
Oct 26, 2016
Scholarship / The three university courses choice - Applying for Chevening Scholarship, need help with my essay! [11]

okay i will try to write a new essay from scratch according to the format you explained, will be posting it shortly. Also could you check my other thread about the post study career plan essay? your feedback will be very helpful in improving it as well.

There is one more thing i need to ask you before i start writing this essay from scratch. Since all the 3 courses i have chosen are MSc in clinicial dermatology in different universities, offering almost the same knowledge, benefit and effect on my future goals. Writing each one separately will only lead me to repeat the same content in the 3 courses. what do u suggest? also Should i write about my preferred course in my preferred university out of the 3 and the reason for it being my first choice?
Aysha13   
Oct 25, 2016
Scholarship / 'the flexibility and openness to adapt are the keys' - LEADERSHIP & INFLUENCE QUESTION [3]

i am not an expert but what i have understood from reading several essays on this topic before i wrote mine, was that they want you to write specifically in details about your leadership qualities. this incident you mentioned, you wrote more about what was the problem and less about how you changed it and showed your leadership skills. I think you should elaborate more on what you exactly did and how you used your leadership abilities in leading your team towards success.

hope this helps. :)
Aysha13   
Sep 20, 2016
Scholarship / 'Dermatology career' - Post study career plan. Chevening scholarship essay [2]

Finished writing my post study career plan essay for Chevening, looking for corrections and suggestions.

Chevening is looking for individual who have a clear post-study career plan. Please outline your immediate plans upon returning home and your long term career goals. You may wish to consider how these relate to what the uk government is doing in your country.

Upon completing my Master's degree in dermatology, my first option would be to work as a dermatologist in a well reputed hospital back home and use my new abilities to good practice.Treating a variety of skin diseases on a daily basis is sure to boost my confidence and gain me the work experience to pursue my long term goal of establishing an exceptional international standard dermatology centre in India.

As we know universally recognised credentials are more important than ever in today's global healthcare market. Hence, after working for few years I would like to apply for the MRCP UK examination in dermatology as this will give me the international recognition needed to be a consultant dermatologist.

My second option upon returning home would be to apply for a PhD degree in dermatology most favourably from the UK (if I would be able to support it financially), and upon completion would like to work as a dermatology professor in India and teach medical students. Teaching my desired field for several years would help to broaden my knowledge and use my passion and interest to aspire and mentor medical graduates to become future dermatologist. Teaching would also give me the opportunity to implement broad based awareness campaigns, seminars and lectures about the impact of skin diseases and there available treatment's specifically in the rural and peri-urban population in India. Apart from that it will help me interact with doctors, professors and students of similar interest, which would be very beneficial for my long term goal.

Weather I choose option one or two my ultimate goal (10 years from now) would remain to establish a Skin Care Centre in India. One that caters all skin care facilities under one roof, which uses all the updated technologies and affordable treatments needed for patient care and provides them with a clean hygienic environment. A centre that has all - medical as well as cosmetic and surgical dermatology procedures available to the diverse population of my country.

Apart from that I would like to start a training fellowship program sponsored by my organisation for medical graduates interested in this field, to be able to impart my knowledge and skills which I would have gained from my work experiences and my renowned education from the UK.

As our Prime Minister Narendra Modi has said 'India and the UK make an unbeatable combination'. This hold true specially in the healthcare department where the UK have been a major partner in helping India develop in four specific areas - the improvement of healthcare services, education and training, digital health, and hospital infrastructure.

Several healthcare events have taken place in India recently under the auspices of the Indo - British Health Initiative. The most recent one was held in June 2016, where the Chairman of NHS England, its Managing Director and 23 British organisations were on a visit to India under the theme of 'smart healthcare'. As India's plan for 100 smart cities has a goal to provide accessible, affordable, and effective healthcare system for more than 1.2 billion citizens.

Many such missions and projects will take place in the near future between the two countries for mutual benefits.The UK with its experience of universal healthcare provided by the NHS has a lot to offer to India in this endeavour. Similarly as India is one of the fastest growing economics in the world, with over one billion people, and since its investment in its healthcare system is increasing it's becoming a vast market for UK healthcare services and technologies.

Chevening scholarship will be the brilliant launch pad for my dermatology career; I would be honoured to be part of a scholarship that will strengthen the ties between the two countries. To take the world class education, skills and wonderful experiences of a multi-cultural community back home and use it to benefit and serve my country.
Aysha13   
Sep 15, 2016
Scholarship / The three university courses choice - Applying for Chevening Scholarship, need help with my essay! [11]

Thank you so much for your corrections, i will definitely use them in my essay. Currently i am having a hard time trying to figure out what to delete as its a 735 word essay and the max word limit for it is 500. do u have any suggestions regarding this? is it very important to stick to the word limit allowed ?

i was thinking about deleting the first paragraph but it was the perfect beginning for my essay :(

i really need help in editing this essay!? i am unable to decide which parts to delete till it becomes within 500 words. please please i am desperate for some guidance and suggestions. will be highly appreciated.
Aysha13   
Sep 14, 2016
Scholarship / The three university courses choice - Applying for Chevening Scholarship, need help with my essay! [11]

I am applying for the Chevening scholarship, just finished writing one of the answers for the four questions.My answer is very long i need help in editing it and make it within the word count of 500 and also looking forward on your corrections, comments and suggestions. Thank you.

Outline why you have selected your chosen three university courses, and explain how this relates to your previous academic or professional experiences and your plan for the future.

From my experience there are two categories of medical students. Those who are absolutely sure as to what field of medicine they want to specialize in from the very beginning of medical school , then there are those who leave there options open till the very end, till they have learned a great deal about the complex human body and its functions. I believe I belonged to the second category, and didn't really have my mind set on one particular organ.

My interest in Dermatology started in 5th year of medical school when I studied the Skin Hair and nail module in great length and learned about their associated diseases and treatments. What intrigued me was the fact that 'dermatology is an art of seeing'. It offers the possibility to make a diagnosis by sight without any further evidence or technological aids. This is not possible in most of the other disciplines. My interest grew deeper during the internship year, when I worked as an intern in the dermatology rotation. It made me experience the clinical aspects of it, and I was fascinated by the fact that the field is so diverse and multi-faceted. You get to see everything - from harmless rashes to life threatening illnesses. It allows you to practice both things- work as a surgeon as well as provide non-surgical treatments.

When I shifted to India immediately after internship in 2011, I took a break from my career and got married. After settling down I started working as a General Physician in a private hospital in Lucknow, India. As rewarding as that is I knew I will never be satisfied until I become a dermatologist. Living and working in my home country has only encouraged me to per sue my specialization.

As dermatology is a fast growing field of medicine worldwide, in India alone the skin care segment has shown tremendous growth in recent years. Factors like global warming, anti-aging solutions, growing media influences, increase in disposable incomes, lifestyle related disorders, craze for cosmetic surgeries, low cost of treatment, and booming medical tourism are driving this market. As the living standards in India are improving there is a rising concern about beauty and looks especially among the youth. But this growth and change is mostly seen in urban regions, like Chandigarh, Mumbai, Chennai, Delhi etc.

In smaller cities like Lucknow, where I live there is still a lack of awareness in the general population and the skin care centres cater to only a small segment of skin treatments and a particular segment of the society. The situation is further worsened by the low availability of dermatologist In India. The severity of growing skin diseases in India is further emphasized by the fact the WHO has included skin diseases under the most common non-communicable diseases in India. Hence there is a dire need of comprehensive skin care setups providing all skin care treatments under one roof.

The course I have chosen is MSc in Clinical Dermatology at the University of Cardiff and at the Kings College London and MSc Dermatology skills and treatment at university of Hertfordshire.

The MSc in clinical Dermatology offered at Cardiff and Kings College London is my desired program to do as it is a well-structured, highly practical one year taught program designed specifically for medical graduates willing to specialize in dermatology. It will provide me a combination of clinical skills and knowledge as well as laboratory sciences relevant to skin diseases. It will give me the opportunity to learn from the best as many of the lectures and clinics are led by world leading experts in dermatology.

Studying in UK will provide me with a master's degree that will be recognized and reputed worldwide. This program will be the perfect start to my dermatology career back home. It will provide me the confidence, skills and knowledge required to reach my long term goal of opening up a world class skin care treatment centre in India. To be a part of the change required in my country, to expand and improve the skin treatment facilities provided to them.

I look forward to the social and academic challenges of being a chevening scholar. I am aware of the demands of a full time taught postgraduate course, but my commitment and desire to become a dermatologist will only be strengthen through my experiences at one of the prestigious universities in UK.
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