Posts by moony stone

moony stone

Nov 5, 2016

Scholarship / Networking is like planting a garden; how you meet the requirement for networking skill? [2]

Networking is like planting a garden,the more we expand,the more benefits we will get.When I became a class monitor during my middle school years,I had communicated with my classmate and built a good network with them.Because it is the indirect way to influence them.And I was starting to join nearly all the activities and charity events from school.

I joined FUTURE YOUTH young organization in my early university days.And I also joined music club,book club and debate club as well.It make many friends and strong network between senior,junior and me.Volunteering jobs also gave me precious contact with many donators,CEOs from many sectors,organizers and colleagues.Because I volunteered since my student life,I got many recommendations from them when I applied my job after graduate.As a member of Myanmar Engineering Society ,I built a strong network with senior engineer,professors ,construction company and other field engineer suppliers.

When Myanmar was flooded in august,more than ten thousand people were affected,I immediately try to hold a small charity group to help flooded people from some regions.It has

been two years continuously flooded in Myanmar in rainy seasons,we discussed to run this group permanently in order to support the flood affected people.This charity event was formed because of strong network with many donators and colleagues from previous volunteer group called Pan Pyoe Latt.I understood the power of networking and decide to expand my social network more and more.

At my career,my employer work as a freelance and he don't like to work with many staffs.So I take over all the tasks from him and to complete them in time.I communicate with clients,I have to also explain contractors what clients want and which way we want to build plus supervise workers' actions,find technical error and command them to fix them all.I also keep in touch with suppliers to control the quality of materials we use in buildings.The most important thing to smooth our procedures of work,I have to always keep good network with all of them.I'm always balancing my decisions and my networking between them.The hardest part of the work is negotiating between architect and structural engineer.In one of our project,the architect want wide perspective glass windows and the structural engineer can't allow it.In our view of technically,it is quite dangerous to left some beams from the walls.A good networking skill can always fix the problem.Because I have a good relation with the architect,she let me put the beams in the glass windows.She changed the design and the structural engineer also satisfied.But the client and I had the longest discussion about the design and finally it was done smoothly with everybody's satisfaction.

I would like to get in contact with Chevening organization,alumini,many senior of my career and other aspects in UK.I will be able to share my experience in UK study and be a link for Myanmar students who are eager to apply this scholar.And further more,I will be using this chance of building network with them and be a part of our country developing program.

moony stone

Nov 5, 2016

Graduate / How does the mother tongue affect to speaking English of first years student Vietnamese [2]

@dieutuyet

You have used many repetitive words in passage 1.
eg.make the use of language that language is different from the standard deviation
you can write like this>>make the use of language that is different from standard deviation.

And to be honest,I noticed that you used the complicated sentences.
eg.." However, these studies almost exclusively focused primarily on ...
you can simplify this sentence by reducing the adjective you used>>However,these studies almost focused exclusively and primarily on the transferred language.

moony stone

Nov 4, 2016

Writing Feedback / Flying in the United States. How content were customers from the aircraft service there? [4]

@faizunaa17

To be honest,you should use different vocabulary to get interest.Instead of using 'dissatisfied' twice in second paragraph,you can write 'unlikable.Every IELTS writing needs your opnion,you must put it at least once.Like 'in conclusion' you can put your vision upon the chart.

with regards

moony stone

Nov 3, 2016

Scholarship / Tell me how you meet the requirements of leadership [5]

@Holt

I edit a little to my essay and here it is.

Leadership ,this simple word has deep,profound meanings and responsibilities.Being called as a leader is not just taking the name ,it is also taking the responsibilities.I have been faced many projects and missions as a leader and I found out that the problems solving skill,motivation skill,strategic planning skill are the main points the leader needed to have.At my early age of primary school,I played many games at school that support teamwork.Team work cannot be smooth without a proper leadership.Even at that age,I understood that point.A good leader lead the team to achievements.

During my middle school days,I was so motivated in projects and charity events that were held by school.I was starting to know the feeling of accomplishing goals under my lead.It is so amazing and I served as class monitor,project leader,cleanline supervisor of the class and took many responsibilities as a small leader.These small achievements gave me many experiences of leading people and understanding them.After I finished my high school,I attend my first year in Technological University Mandalay.Because I experienced many projects as a leader,I know how to influence people,how to listen to them and how to consider their suggestions.As a leader of my university projects,I could have solved many problems and took them to the "Goal".And I successfully held the small group of consulting for high school students about their problems,their dilemma of which major to choose and many other.It was a non profit small group and I am still proud of what I have done for them.

I also volunteered at a poor child educating program of "Pan Pyoe Latt" organization.There are many kinds of leadership,so we should not be stubborn about the methods.As a teacher in this program I lead not only children but also junior volunteers.It is very difficult to lead self orientation people .I tried to persuade them in many ways,balanced and improved relationship with them also.Discussion and negotiation became the indirect leadership here.I faced many arguments and disagreements.Leaders should not close their perspective on situation.I never consider only my opinions are right.I encouraged them to open to me and we always discussed about the issue we faced,changed the problems into possibilities.I always mind like our mission is to educate the children not to fight about our courses,we can always deal about it.

After graduate,as a young leader in my work(I work as a site engineer at U Min Min Oo construction),I lead many labours in site.All of them are skillful worker and much more experience in construction field than me.They all can do their duty well but they need to be managed and arranged the duties.That is my responsibilities absolutely.Because they are older than me,it is hard for them to treat me like a leader.I learned about civil engineering but the school didn't teach me to understand their mind.It was hard for me to influence them.I cannot collaborate with them,also cannot share their vision in managing the site because of education gap.But I tried to be a good listener for them.Always open and welcome their advices and it is useful mostly.In my opinion,being a leader is hard but it is harder to influence people.A leader cannot make pointing order only.He is going to show his actions and way himself enthusiastically.Understanding people mind first and plan the strategies which can suit with them. They will inspire our actions first and then they will follow our ideas.That's called true leadership and influencing.

moony stone

Nov 2, 2016

Scholarship / Tell me how you meet the requirements of leadership [5]

Dear Holt,

Thank you in advanece for your specific comment.
Because of word limitation,I can't add more about my high school experience.If you won't mind please kindly advice me which part should I drop.

And ofcourse,I will add detail about construction firm and volunteer job.
Thank alot.

moony stone

Oct 28, 2016

Scholarship / Tell me how you meet the requirements of leadership [5]

Leadership ,this simple word has deep,profound meanings and responsibilities.I have been faced many projects and missions as a leader.Team work cannot be smooth without a proper leadership.My very first leadership was one of university projects in my first year.It was surveying and copying benchmark from Mandalay hill to our university.We walked about 25 miles while carrying survey tools and other stuffs.

It was on a very sunny day and I still remember that the temperature on that day was extremely high.All the members were really upset of carrying stuffs and walking under the hot sun.It was a hard situation for me to collect their mind and motivate them.Optimism is a leader must have skill.I tried to be optimistic and lead them to that situation of positivity.Small jokes,collaboration with them,sharing positive vision on the situation and emphasizing our actions lead us to our goal.My team reached the university in time under my lead.I considered leadership is not ordering,it is responsibilities, collaboration,applying strategies and the most important fact is that understanding people's mind.I got a point from this project,we cannot make people follow us by force.We are gonna show them what we can do for the team,how can we lead them and how can we participate as a leader in team.

I also volunteered at a poor child educating program.There are many kinds of leadership,so we should not be stubborn about the methods.As a teacher in this program I lead not only children but also junior volunteers.It is very difficult to lead self orientation people .I tried to persuade them in many ways,balanced and improved relationship with them also.Discussion and negotiation became the indirect leadership here.I faced many arguments and disagreements.Leaders should not close their perspective on situation.I never consider only my opinions are right.I encouraged them to open to me and we always discussed about the issue we faced,changed the problems into possibilities.

After graduate,as a young leader in my work(I work as a site engineer),I lead many general labours in site.All of them are skillful worker and much more experience in constructive works than me.They all can do their duty well but they need to be managed and arranged the duties.That is my responsibilities absolutely.Because they are older than me,it is hard for them to treat me like a leader.I learned about civil engineering but the school didn't teach me to understand workers' mind.It was hard for me to influence them.I cannot collaborate with them,also cannot share their vision in managing the site because of education gap.But I tried to be a good listener for them.Always open and welcome their advices and it is useful mostly.In my opinion,being a leader is hard but it is harder to influence people.A leader cannot make pointing order only.He is going to show his actions and way himself enthusiastically.Understanding people mind first and plan the strategies which can suit with them. They will inspire our actions first and then they will follow our ideas.That's called true leadership and influencing.