APPEAL FOR NUS PROJECT AND FACILITIES MANAGEMENT

Hi. I got rejected by NUS for this course and I wish to appeal. This is my appeal letter that has yet to be submitted and I would appreciate your honest opinions and assistance if needed. Thank you.

"Despite the nature and expectations of this course being dynamic and demanding, I am certain that with my passion for project organization and coordination, I will thrive well in this field. I am aware of the roles of teamwork, effective data analysis and time management in ensuring a successful project.

As I adapt to changing surroundings quickly and enjoy working in diverse environments, I see myself in the construction and management line in the near future. I am sure that entering this course would allow me to maximise the potential of our existing facilities and venture into constructing new ones to increase the living standards and meet our fellow citizens' needs.

A firm grounding in Economics will assist me in decision making as I can better analyse both domestic and global markets.

I will use this chance to learn, rectify my weaknesses and prepare myself for the corporate world. I hope to be considered for a place in this esteemed course that will help fulfil my dreams."

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Add mention of 3 - 5 short term goals.
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As I adapt to changing surroundings quickly and enjoy...

That's my best advice for you! :-)
You will persuade them if your plan is detailed and inspirational. Inspire them with your great short term goals based on what you believe in. If you revise, I think you should try to explain your plan for the next three years. Really confront them with the responsibility of deciding whether this serious student will be able to carry out her meaningful plan.