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consume the chemical food usually do by people from past time to nowadays, because organic vegetable



YULIS 9 / 16  
Oct 22, 2014   #1
Prompt : consume the chemical food usually do by people from past time to nowadays, because organic vegetables is difficult to find.

Consuming the chemical food is bad trend that usually do by people. This bad trend has happened since in the past until nowadays. We live in modern time where everyone need something in quick time, such as instant food, but they do not think what consist in. This essay will explain about the dangerous risks and outweigh the advantages of that trend.

These days, people who work in the companies, offices, departments, banks or many others, they need quick something to manage their time everyday. Sometimes people need some instant food, so they will not spend their time on the dining table. People can get the instant food by supermarket such as, instant salad, fresher vegetables and others. They do not think about some disadvantages of those food. This paragraph will explain some of the bad effects of instant food which contains some chemicals on it. Cancer , heart disease, cholesterol and bad fat are some of the diseases that will happen if people consume in much portion. It is because the supermarket gets much of vegetables from the farmer, and supermarket need all requirement for consumers everyday so everyday they must have much stock of vegetables and other instant food.

Even though, in the fact the vegetables cannot grow up on quick time, it can a rise faster if it is given more chemical product. They need some days to make some nutrition in their leafs and their body. They give some special product to get quick time for harvest to get fresher vegetables and more benefits from supermarket. They do not think about the risks for long term. It is why the chemical food is very dangerous to consume everyday. Beside that, the chemical or instant food also have few advantages, for example : it will save the time, will give more benefit to farmer because they can get much money if people buy the unorganic vegetables everyday, quicker and easier to get it in supermarket especially.

Overall, this bad trend should be changed by people themselves . It is because when people consume much unhealthy food their body will make diseases in the future.

Mann_ms 9 / 18  
Oct 22, 2014   #2
Consuming the chemical food is bad trend that usually do by people. This bad trend has happened since in the past until nowadays.

Hy YULIS: I think you should avoid using word like bad, good, the best, etc in your essay...

We live in modern time where everyone need something in quick time, such as instant food

People can get the instant food by supermarket such as, instant salad

maybe you shouldn't put comma here

These days, people who work in the companies, offices, departments, banks or many others , they need quick something to manage their time everyday.

*also avoid using lazy words such as many others, etc, and so on, and things like that
It would be better if you just write "companies, offices, departements, and banks."

*avoid using these words : needles to say that "so" it would be better in spoken language, maybe you can change with as a result.

They givesome special products to get quick time for harvest to get fresher vegetables and more benefits from supermarket.
Vns9x 102 / 230  
Oct 25, 2014   #3
Great essay. However, you could easily merge those 2 body paratraphs. In other words, do not attempt to separate your thoughts that way. The raters are professional. Consequently, quantity over quality.


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