I am not sure if this is in the right format.. Is this concise? Would this letter improve my chances at all? I will send it tomorrow!
Another question! Should I send it to the regional officer or directly to the admissions office? Thanks so much to whoever helps!
Here it is:
May 4, 2014
Dear members of the Admissions Committee:
I am writing to reiterate my interest in becoming a member of UPenn's Class of 2018. While the University of Pennsylvania has been my top choice since I began the application process, my interview with Mr. Terrence Seller and further research of the Annenberg School of Communication have made it clear that the University of Pennsylvania would be a perfect fit for me.
While I know that UPenn has a lot to offer me as a student, I also feel that I would bring a unique perspective to my class and become a dynamic contributor to the community. In my current role in the Service Committee for the National Honors Society, I have worked with Catholic Charities in a project to collect suitcases and other goods to those in need of our community. As a student at UPenn, I will seek to engage in the concentration in Communication and Public Service, where I can utilize and hone the skills I've gained through my previous experiences of serving others.
I also wanted to notify the Admissions Committee of updates to my application. Since submitting the application in January, I have been focused on concluding my high school career with a strong finish. As well as maintaining good grades in school, I have been involved in my church and music. As well as cantoring on regular basis, I have played the ukulele at the First Holy Communion masses and put on a production at the Good Friday Mass. Currently, I am preparing for my senior recital with my voice instructor, Jody Kienzler and for State Oral Math Competition. I look forward to the vast opportunities that are present at UPenn to further develop these interests.
Thank you for your time and continued consideration. While I have already heard back from other great schools, University of Pennsylvania is absolutely my top choice; if I am admitted, I will definitely attend. Please let me know if you have any questions regarding my application, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely,
Min gi Park
p.s. May the Fourth be with you!
^(Should I include this or no? lol)
Another question! Should I send it to the regional officer or directly to the admissions office? Thanks so much to whoever helps!
Here it is:
May 4, 2014
Dear members of the Admissions Committee:
I am writing to reiterate my interest in becoming a member of UPenn's Class of 2018. While the University of Pennsylvania has been my top choice since I began the application process, my interview with Mr. Terrence Seller and further research of the Annenberg School of Communication have made it clear that the University of Pennsylvania would be a perfect fit for me.
While I know that UPenn has a lot to offer me as a student, I also feel that I would bring a unique perspective to my class and become a dynamic contributor to the community. In my current role in the Service Committee for the National Honors Society, I have worked with Catholic Charities in a project to collect suitcases and other goods to those in need of our community. As a student at UPenn, I will seek to engage in the concentration in Communication and Public Service, where I can utilize and hone the skills I've gained through my previous experiences of serving others.
I also wanted to notify the Admissions Committee of updates to my application. Since submitting the application in January, I have been focused on concluding my high school career with a strong finish. As well as maintaining good grades in school, I have been involved in my church and music. As well as cantoring on regular basis, I have played the ukulele at the First Holy Communion masses and put on a production at the Good Friday Mass. Currently, I am preparing for my senior recital with my voice instructor, Jody Kienzler and for State Oral Math Competition. I look forward to the vast opportunities that are present at UPenn to further develop these interests.
Thank you for your time and continued consideration. While I have already heard back from other great schools, University of Pennsylvania is absolutely my top choice; if I am admitted, I will definitely attend. Please let me know if you have any questions regarding my application, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely,
Min gi Park
p.s. May the Fourth be with you!
^(Should I include this or no? lol)