Hello, I am in need of help to check my grammars and the way that I present an opinion so that I can make the most out of one letter. It is my first time applying to study in Canada and I don't know if I have done the cover letter justice. Also, I am not a very good student, with only 2.75 GPA, but I love to learn and I don't give up. Can you please help me to emphasize my strength? I would be grateful if anyone can help me, I intend to send the letter in roughly 3 months.
Thank you a lot.
Below is my cover letter
study permit application letter
Tran The Thong
457A/23 Nhat Tao St, Ward 6, District 10
Tel: 01227847014 - Email: dexterloax@gmail.
The Canadian Embassy
Ho Chi Minh, Vietnam.
Dear Visa Officer,
My name is Tran The Thong. I wish to apply for a study permit. I am currently studying third year Mechantronics at Eastern International University. It has always been my dream to study abroad, however my English skill wasn't proficient enough until recent years. After joining quite a few conferences about studying overseas, I chose Canada to look for a university, due to its reputation of friendliness and political stability. Furthermore, I love the snow, the peace and quietness and the fact that Canada is ranked second of all the nations in terms of education.
I was also fortunate enough to know about Cape Breton University from Canadian Education International's conference, which saved me a lot of research time. After a brief discussion with a CBU representative there, I learned that CBU offers a transfer program of which I can continue my study in Engineering. That is why I decided to apply for CBU course of Engineering.
In all honesty, I consider myself to be an underachiever and a slow student, which is why I usually fail a lot before I start to succeed. Most of the time I always come short a few points for the lowest mark, which is D. However, I am praised by a lot of my professors for my honesty, commitment and my attitude towards my work. In short, I do not give up that is why I am in good grace of some of them and they allow me to come into their lectures or research rooms in subjects that I feel I need to study more.
Another good thing about me is that my ability to connect what I have learned with each other and apply it to real life, which my professors said a lot of students in Vietnam lack. Because of my passion in robots, I have been learning C++, C, Java and C# alone, including doing small projects on Proteus simulating Engine control, thermosensor control, LCD and ICs with the help of my professors. I believe my strength is in my will and curiosity to learn. That is why I was captain of both Physics and Math team in High school, we did not win any prize, but it was a great learning opportunity for me and my team.
By studying in CBU-a truly international environment, I could receive an even better help from experts there. With my will to learn and the expertise of the professors of one of the best education system in the world, I am confident that I will get a lot better at Once I have graduated, I will look forward to working for Robotics 3T (it is run by Vietnamese and have achieved some successes recent years) or even bigger companies such as Mitsubishi, FANUC and Kawasaki. My dream is to have the mark "Made in Vietnam" on robots around the world and that I am one of the people who will have made them. There are so many opportunities here for engineers like me. However, I recognize my weaknesses and since robot related subjects are relatively new in Vietnam, I need to study at CBU to make the most of my time. In addition to that, a degree at CBU can really help me score higher with job interviewers in Vietnam, which will really help me get a better job and boost the process of getting it faster.
In general, I am confident that with my honesty and my passion, I would be granted a study permit to help me pursue my dream and return to my family here as soon as possible.
Thank you for your time,
Tran The Thong