Letter inviting a company to open one of their branches in my country

I live in XXX, capital of YYY.
XXX population is #### people.
I believe that opening up your shop in XXX will be great for you. Citizens of our town love everything new for them, so I am sure that your shop will attract many clients in our country, as it does in other countries. Besides of that, YYY is one of the popular countries for tourists from all over the world (and I will attract URL for the website here, which officially says that it is) and it has the fastest growing economy in Eastern Europe according to (URL of the website in here) so I believe that your shop will work great in XXX.

I hope that you will be interested in opening up your shop in YYY, if you do so, I will be glad and honored to support your business in our country. I can report every information you need to know if you will be interested.

(help me please to make this latter more official, I'm going to send it for the big company for real, if you think that something is missing then feel free to add it, XXX - is my country, YYY- capital (for example) and help me with intro and outtro please. thank you very much)

Its good but need little bit more changes.

First, it is not very clear from your topic that you need to write a letter requesting some company to open a new branch in your country. But I guess so. It's always good if you include the full prompt together with your essay so that we all can understand it better. However, if you are to write such letter (the way I assumed) then you first need to introduce yourself. Tell them your name and what you do. If you are a person representing some important organization, that company will give more consideration for your request. Then tell them why you make this request and why are keen about that.

it's ok if I am just a student? and how do you think, what's missing?

First, you should have included the question or the prompt together with your writing so that others would not have raised those concerns above because they would be clear about what your question expects the answer to be. So, make sure you always include the question/ prompt.


I don't understand your first question :)
Is this for IELTS? Then you need to follow the specific structure to earn marks.