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Master of Science in Big Data - Motivation Letter for Applying Scholarship and University


nabilah_hannan 4 / 8 2  
Apr 13, 2020   #1

Big Data study application at Innopolis University



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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am applying for the Master of Science in Big Data at Innopolis University for 2020 intake. The Master in Big Data Science is a world-leading program of study in analytics and data science. As a bachelor of computer science, I aspire to have a career in the field of computer science, mainly in data science. Through this master's degree, I can participate in a variety of emerging careers in the growth of data science.

My interest in data science began when I read about an online Data Science and Technology Series learning class which was organized by Dattabot. Based on The Harvard Business Review, the data scientist has been labeled as the sexiest job of the 21st century. It means that the need for data scientists is increasing dramatically. So, this made me interested and registered for the online class. Data science has many benefits in various fields such as health, business, education, and others. Therefore, Indonesia needs a lot of data scientists.

My involvement with the field of data science was getting more frequent because I was invited to join a new group, the Data Science Research Group (DSRG), which is fostered by lecturers at my department. To expand our community, with the assistance of our supervisor, DSRG joined Data Science Indonesia and changed its name to the Data Science Indonesia (DSI) chapter North Sumatera. As a branch of DSI, DSI chapter North Sumatera also run work programs that were ordered by DSI, such as holding a 4-day Google Cloud Study Jam workshop, where I was one of the two speakers. I delivered material about NCAA® March Madness®: Bracketology with Google Cloud. Besides the external activities such as workshops, DSI chapter North Sumatera also held internal learning classes among the main members about machine learning algorithms, data visualization, data extraction, statistics and other topics related to data science. This community really encouraged me to explore more about data science. That knowledge and expertise can give me a path to pursue my master's degree.

Moreover, because I am pursuing the field of data science, my thesis for my bachelor's degree was also about data science in the field of health where I utilized data from the examination of the clinical pathology laboratory. The purpose of this research was to determine dyslipidemia based on lipid function and also see indications of disease based on complete blood laboratory tests, blood chemistry, and urinalysis. Meanwhile, the method used in this research was classification using the Naïve Bayes Classifier algorithm. This research was done by preparing training data in CSV file format and testing data in PDF file format. At first, my probability predictions for each class were too general and poor. Therefore, I used a probability calibration to add support for probability prediction and it worked well. This study resulted in a quite reliable system for determining dyslipidemia and medical diseases. Through this research, I've learned about the implementation of the Naïve Bayes Classifier algorithm, data preprocessing, probability calibration, framework flask, data extraction and model selection, and evaluation. By doing this research, I've realized that I need to gain more knowledge and expertise in data science in order to generate a more reliable system. Besides this research, I also made other attempts related to data science to study the implementation of the algorithms such as creating a recommendation system and so on. Because of my interest in data science, I decided to continue my master's degree in big data at Innopolis University.

Since I was in college until now, I have joined several online classes related to computer science such as web programming, Linux, data science, data structures and algorithms, probability and statistics, linear algebra, Python, and so on. I realize my shortcomings in the field of data science, that's why I want to pursue my master's degree to excel it. I did not only take online classes, but in 2019, I also took offline classes held by Digital Talent Scholarship for the Fresh Graduate Academy in the field of big data analytics where there was an online test for the selection stage. This Digital Talent Scholarship was held by the Ministry of Communication and Information Technology Republic of Indonesia.

With my educational background and experiences, I believe that I am a suitable candidate for this program. This master's program can develop my creative thinking skills and my ability to confront contemporary challenges. It also aimed to provide students with real industry Data Science skills, namely from defining a business problem to presenting the work results, solution implementation and reporting. I need those skills because they are very prominent parts to be a professional data scientist. I have some subjects that I want to study at Innopolis University such as Machine Learning, Big Data, and High-Dimensional Data Analysis.

Innopolis University is quite a new university in Russia, but it is the first Russian university that focuses on Information Technology and Robotics using English as the language of instruction. As the university focused on Information Technology and Robotics, it means that all its educational programs and research are related to these areas. This is the reason why I choose Innopolis University as my destination university. Besides it, even it is a young university, but it achieves a lot such as in its high-quality education, international environment, comfortable living conditions, academic researches and so on. It has many international and academic cooperation around the world that open the way for the students to do the exchange for a semester in the international partners. I also can get an internship experience in top IT companies in Russia and it will be a great opportunity to excel in data science. It also provides many facilities to support the students' education and research, such as The Data Science and Information Systems (Dainfos) Lab focused on large-scale data management and data-driven analytics.

Regarding the Master of Science in Big Data, it offers an accurate and relevant curriculum taught by one of the best faculty in the world. Then, its mission for Master of Science in Big Data is to provide its students with advanced theoretical knowledge and analytical training which would enable them to learn from big data and build state-of-the-art artificial intelligence systems. "Innopolis University is meant to be a brain force, an integral element of a new Innopolis city - the future IT capital of Russia", is the state from Innopolis University which amazes me about how ambitious Innopolis University is. I strongly believe the Innopolis University is a promising university in the field of Information Technology. Then, I believe taking a master of data science will be excellent preparation for my career in data science.

After I come back from Russia, I want to become a lecturer in computer science and information technology faculty in data science specialization in Medan, North Sumatera. My goals are delivering my knowledge and experiences to my students as a contribution of data science development in Indonesia and conducting some research related to data science which can be applied in society and be useful for the progress of Indonesia, especially Medan.

Besides contributing to a university, I want to share my knowledge and skills through communities where I can reach out to people outside who are interested in data science. In Medan, North Sumatera, there are only a few speakers for data science, not as much as in Jakarta. Therefore, that is not easy enough to find a speaker.

Then, I want to make Data Science Indonesia chapter North Sumatera more active and do collaborations with other communities.

I understand that many other competitors have the same goals as me. However, I am sure that my efforts and abilities that I have can open the way for me. Therefore, I would be honored if you choose to accept my candidates for this master's program. At the same time, I am aware of possible challenges and high order to successfully complete this course. I hope to be accepted on this chance to realize my future career.

Thank you very much for your attention in considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.

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Can you please review my motivation letter, please? I haven't checked all of the previous review yet, so I post it again

This is the guideline for motivation letter given by the Innopolis University

Ideas and main points
Start with writing down some of the main ideas, important points you would like to approach in your letter and later build around them, enrich their content; an example would be:

1. Make your goal clear, provide a short preview of the rest of the letter;
2. Why do you think that the Innopolis University and the program are interesting and suitable for you? It is important that you demonstrate the understanding of the program and make commitment towards successful completion of it;

3. Focus on some of your strongest qualifications, past experiences and qualities; organize the middle paragraphs in terms of the qualifications most relevant for the program you apply, you can also refer to your CV for more details;

4. Conclude by restating your interest and show appreciation for the chance to prove yourself in the letter.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,835 4783  
Apr 13, 2020   #2
You have to shorten the motivational letter. Try to keep it within 5 paragraphs. Remember, you have the instructions for writing the motivation letter for a reason. You should only be using a total of 4 paragraphs for this essay but, due to the qualifications, experiences and qualities indication in the instructions, I am advising you to cut this down to 5 paragraphs instead of the 4 represented in the guidelines. You can either have a professional edit this essay for you to meet the motivation letter requirements or, you can decide which aspects you want to present in the motivation letter and edit the essay yourself. The first half of your letter that focuses on researched information and a reference to the development of your interest is totally not required in this presentation. Those are the paragraphs that made this letter extremely long, in a highly irrelevant manner.


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