Having recently received my bachelor's degree in Finance at Azerbaijan State Economic University, my ambition of pursuing an excellent business master program has led me to apply to your master's degree of International Business. The hands-on approach, philosophy of cultural diversity and pedagogical focus on globalization of this program are not only in continuation with my undergraduate academic achievements thus far, but also a dream matches to my future academic goals. After a long time of searching, I found that Grenoble Graduate School of Business is really what I am looking for. I trust that applying for this program starting in Fall 2013 is irrefutably beneficial as a personal development experience.
My interest in economics and business area emerged at secondary school when I faced the subject <Essentials of economics>. After leaving secondary school, I decided to enter the institution of higher education in the field of economics and applied for it. I successfully passed the overall state admission exam; my score was 535 over 700. While studying at ASEU, I took a great variety of disciplines, but among all the subjects, the most interesting to me were always the ones concerned with business processes. My GPA is -/100. Striving to make the best of my education, I regularly took advantage of the various resources and extra-curricular activities offered by the university to heighten my leadership abilities and cross-cultural awareness. I was an active member of our university's students' scientific society. I was also a member of international youth organization - AIESEC. I have managed several projects with AIESEC as a team and have participated in numerous events. This organization helped me to develop my managerial, decision-making and negotiation skills. Thus I gained a valuable practical experience which strengthened my leadership skills and allowed me to improve my team working skills.
At the age of 21, I am proud to say that I already have a solid background behind me. The main notable example is my experience as a sales manager/cashier in a large retail shop for 4 years. This work from a business acumen point of view helped me to gain budget planning and supervising skills. The position as a sales manager in a large retail shop also hugely affected my linguistic skills as well. The customers of our shop were from different nationalities and because of this factor, interaction with clients required the additional knowledge of various languages as Russian and Turkish for example. In result, this awkward obstacle in my job transformed to the opportunity of specializing in this languages.
I would be thrilled to be accepted for this program. In exchange for the program's academic excellence, I believe I offer leadership, a strong background and a desire to go one step further than the rest. I have the right academic record, the right skills and attitude to succeed and I am convinced that this program is the right stepping-stone for my professional ambitions.
When applying for business school, your motivation letter needs to have more detailed than what you have provided here. They will want to know why you need another degree in business so soon after you completed your undergraduate? They will also want to know what are you really seeking from this degree. Why this degree now? So overall this is not a good motivation letter as it doesn't read as though you have really thought about the process fully. You don't really talk about why you need this degree and what your intentions are post degree. These are all the BASIC elements needed to write a decent motivational statement to a business school.
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I have been selected as a finalist for a scholarship. Therefore, I can share some of my experiences.
You should not mention directly these following sentences, since the university can find you a little arrogant
1/ I successfully passed the overall state admission exam; my score was 535 over 700. Just to mention about your point, they will know you are good at academic exam
2/I took a great variety of disciplines
This sentence is great: Striving to make the best of my education, I regularly took advantage of the various resources and extra-curricular activities offered by the university to heighten my leadership abilities and cross-cultural awareness.
However, try to clarify more about it in the following sentences, because i found the rest of the passage was just overall thing. Take the example of a situation which you can illustrate your leadership skill is much better.
Finally, don't forget to tell about your story maybe in the structure of: what did you like to do in the past?, does it trigger you to study in this major? how did you find that major? interesting or smt? why this school and what will you contribute to the school?