Motivation letter for Undergraduate Study program (computer science)

letter of Motivation

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I was writing motivation letter for Polytechnic University of Turin for bachelor program for Computer Science

Discovering and choosing a university that fulfills all of my needs was a rigorous yet exciting task. The Polytechnic University of Toronto clearly emerged as the best choice for me and I, as a great match for the university. After reading the information brochure, and researching the university web site, I realize that this university offers what I hope to gain from my college experience. In return, I will contribute to the university as a person with leadership qualities who takes initiative and enjoys participating in school events.

For many years, I have wanted to become a successful person in technology field, or a programmer. Recently, I have watched one of the TED Talks videos where one young Japanese boy was telling about how he created a technology for his grandfather, who was in struggle with Alzheimer's disease. The main purpose of his technology was in tracking his grandfather's position and to alarm boy if he is going to do something that could hurt him. Then this question blowed my mind up "What if...?" "What if I would be on the place of that boy?" And the saddest thing was that I would like to answer that I couldn't do anything just because of the fact that I am not informed enough in these areas. From then on, I decided that my go-to-spot is being a programmer who can create geek-chic marvels which will be able to help people in their everyday life. And now just the mind of being programmer makes me bouncy and anxious.

It was obvious that I will not study in local universities and I began to search worthy universities with high education quality abroad, and found that the Polytechnic University of Toronto offers BSc. which is the main reason why I am applying. The fact that university is in 334th in QS World University Ranking is just confirming my affirmation. Additionally, the Polytechnic University of Toronto remains that one of the worthy universities in Italy for international students and one of the leading universities in Italy. I strive to become a freshman of such university, as I will get benefit from top standards in teaching, interdisciplinary learning, research involvement, and hands-on education. I hope that here I can get the chance to grow. Now I have good start-up plans which are I believe can solve even governmental issues. However, to reach them, I have to get the best knowledge, and I'm fulfilled that the Polytechnic University of Toronto can growth my potential and help to achieve my goals.

In addition to academic breadth, there are a greater variety of extra-curricular activities available on the larger campus. I am excited about continuing my interests in sports. I have been the captain of my high school's volleyball team for two years and even we took 3rd place in Interschool Tournament. I plan to play volleyball throughout college in your volleyball club.

As part of the student council, taking post of Minister of Cultural department, I have always promoted school spirit, and I intend to continue my enthusiastic involvement throughout my college career. As Minister of Culture, I organized first-class "subject-weeks", educational and entertainment events every month; arranged memorable festivities and sport contests. I have learned through my role to take charge, delegate responsibilities, be creative, innovative, exciting, and take responsibility. I hope to use these attributes to contribute to many of the clubs and activities offered at the Polytechnic University of Toronto.

I have chosen to apply to the Polytechnic University of Toronto for I realize that it is the perfect university for me. A college is ultimately as good as the students who attend, and as a well-rounded student who excels academically, socially, and in her extra curricular activities, I feel that I will add to and learn from the Polytechnic University of Toronto and its flourishing environment. I function most effectively in a small academic setting and will derive all the benefits of the university's intimate yet rich campus. Even thoughts about studying in this university inspires me a lot and I want to finally accomplish my goals I truly believe that I will fulfill my potential by attending this university. That's why I chose the Polytechnic University of Toronto, knowing that it will help me like no other.

The last paragraph would have been highly effective as the establishing paragraph in the opening portion. This should definitely have been the first paragraph as it gives and overview of why the university is a fit for the student and vice versa. Further building on this presentation would be most helpful to the motivational letter.

It is not obvious to the reviewer that you would not be studying college locally. That needs to be established through a motivating paragraph that compares the local educational system with the international program you hope to attend. This paragraph needs a backstory to back up the eventual claim being made. Remove the reference to university ranking. The reviewer is not impressed by information he already knows. Remove any and all references that you took from the website or their brochure. The admissions committee will not be interested in general references for the motivation. These need to be unique in order to make your motivation stand out and memorable to those concerned with your admission.