'I won a prize including a-two-week English course' format CV

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CV

Name:Alaaddin ÖZBOLAT

I was born in 1988 in Yozgat and went to primary school in İstanbul.Then we moved to Sivas and after three years to Yozgat again.In 2002, I entered Yozgat Anatolian High School and succesfully graduated in 2006.Upon graduating I entered university entrance exam and registered Elt department in Atatürk University.

In 2009 I participated an online essay competition called 'Letyourenglishgrow' promoted by British Council.The participants were required to write an essay explaining whey they wanted to study in the UK in 150 words.And as a result I won a prize including a-two-week English course and free accommodation in Brighton,UK.I attended the course and had opportunity to practice my English a lot.

During my university years I worked with academicians in order to pass ÜDS and KPDS.I also lectured in some private institutions.After graduating from university in 2010 I took KPSS and appointed to Erzurum as an English teacher in 2010.I worked in Pasinler Anatolian High School last year.In August 2011,I went to Zonguldak to carry out my military service and lectured English lessons there.Last week I completed military obligation and returned hometown.From now on I will prepare for KPDS and ALES to become a lecturer in a university and get a master's degree,by the way I got 90 in KPDS and 83 in ALES.

It seems a good personal profile to me..

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I was born in 1988 in Yozgat, and went to primary school in İstanbul.---Don't forget to leave a space between sentences! This is very important.

Upon graduating, I took the university entrance exam and registered Elt department in Atatürk University.

In 2009 I participated in an online essay competition called 'Letyourenglishgrow' promoted by British Council.

...and free accommodation in Brighton,UK. I attended the course and had the opportunity to practice my English a lot.

After graduating from university in 2010 I took KPSS and was appointed to Erzurum as an English teacher in 2010.

Last week I completed my military obligation and returned to my hometown.

From now on I will prepare for KPDS and ALES to become a lecturer in a university and get a master's degree, and by the way I got 90 in KPDS and 83 in ALES.

Good luck with all you do!

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I think you should not use the word "by the way" which makes it informal . Instead if you want to add something you can say: Also,....