relaxed application and the opportunity for future
Stipendium Hungaricum comes with fresh air since its process and required documents are not as complicated as the previous applications I have applied prior to this. Coming with the most relax and flexible process doesn't actually make Stipendium Hungaricum less prestigious and competitive. Because it still holds those statuses as well. With all the obstacles and advantages, I once again start a battle. I was born and raised in a small town called Tidore which pretty much resembles Hungary in historical landscapes and mountains full of trees. But it surely doesn't resemble Hungary in the education spirit. Since 2011, I have been independently living alone and far away from my family. I also have the opportunity to staycation in several villages in Eastern Indonesia. I am tremendously attracted to historic buildings as I saw during Makassar International Writers Festival 2018 (it took place in Fort Rotterdam) and mountains full of trees like in Boa, East Nusa Tenggara, where I joined Archipelago Devotion from INAVIS. These atmospheres have a direct impact to boost my mood in creative learning and researching. Therefore, every time I am given the chance to pick a place to study, historic buildings and mountains full of trees show up on the required conditions which can be found easily in Hungary. Other than that, Hungary has an excellent education system and the government pays extra attention to education regulation. It is proven by award-winning programs that happen annually and the effort to realize the internationalization amongst universities. The university that I am applying, University of Szeged and University of Debrecen, won a "research-intensive university" award in 2010. These track records can provide an outstanding opportunity for me to foresee my future study and carrier when I return to Indonesia.
After graduating master's degree, I am planning to regulate a development that will focus on the viability of environmental management and sustainable rehabilitation. I am currently working at PT Halmahera Persada Lygend, one of the active mining companies in North Maluku. The site is located in Obi Island, South Halmahera. Being on-site has given me a real picture of how this dynamic industry is slowly taking over natural resources. The mining activities will surely give a bad impact on the environment and people surrounding in a long-term period, thus it needs to be regulated internally and externally. By taking courses in my chosen university, either Biology or Environmental Sciences, I want to dedicate my research to help Indonesia be on the top three nickel exporter without having to lose its natural resources for the next generation.
In the end, if I am given the opportunity by Stipendium Hungaricum to study and do some research on environmental management and rehabilitation in Hungary, I will focus on developing an effective regulation for the metallurgy and mining industry where it will be based on three pillars; environmental protection, economic development, and social cohesion both on a national and local level. By taking courses in my chosen university, either Biology or Environmental Sciences, I want to dedicate my research to help Indonesia be on the top three nickel exporter without having to lose its natural resources for the next generation.Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,835 
4783 Let me stop you right there, at the beginning of your presentation. Never, ever, ever, compare one scholarship application to another. Not in specific, not in general terms. You do not want the reviewer to think that you are a professional scholarship applicant. Each scholarship program considers itself important and a cut above the rest. You are making the scholarship sound less than that. This portion alone, will make the reviewer reject your application. I am not even going to go forward with reading your paper because, I am reading it from the point of view of an official scholarship reviewer. You just lost your scholarship chance.
Even worse, you speak of staycations in the essay, which makes you sound like a tourist looking for someone to sponsor a long terms stay in the country in the guise of a student. You are really working hard to lose this scholarship application at this point. There are already 2 existing points with which to reject your application. By that point, if the reviewer even gets that far, he won't have any interest in learning about you. He knows enough to help him decide to reject your application.
