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Thanusan - Scholarship Essay - letter of reference by self


Ben14062002 1 / 1  
Jan 6, 2022   #1
Hi,

I'm applying to a scholarship. Here's the question:


Write a letter of reference for yourself in the third person describing how the applicant (you) meets these criteria.


The letter should refer to the specific achievements and experiences. It may also comment on any weaknesses. (300 word maximum)


Having known Thanusan personally for years, I feel he possesses several traits that would make him a good addition to the community of Pearson scholars.

An attribute of his personality that would surely prove useful in university studies is his academic stamina and desire to learn constantly. In Year 12, he decided to study the A Level Mathematics course independently. By staying committed to learning a course spanning two years, he displayed intellectual endurance and a belief to tackle challenges. Therefore, it was only expected when he scored 4 A's in the AS examinations, the only result of its kind at school.

In 2020, he was unanimously elected School Head Boy after being a prefect for four years, and led the Student Council appreciably throughout the year. A highlight of his tenure was founding the AUS Wellbeing and Happiness Club, with the primary goal of ensuring students were mentally healthy enough to allow undisturbed focus on academics. As part of the club's activities, he led his team in carrying out surveys, holding assemblies and assisting any affected students. Thanusan often organizes learning sessions on Zoom, where he mentors peers in subject matters. Currently, he is an e-Cadet, where he helps organize school events and represents the school in external functions.

Thanusan is keen on expanding his knowledge beyond the boundaries of the textbooks. During the summer break, he undertook an eight-week course in nanotechnology, from Duke University. This course greatly benefited him, as he gained useful insight into the technologies used in biomedical engineering to diagnose diseases. Additionally, he is currently working on the Cambridge EPQ, an independent research project, where he looked to explore the possibility of modifying RNA to treat cancers. Being the IOF Olympiads national champion in Cyber and English (2018), MaRRS National Math Bee Champion in 2017, and three-time Royal Spelling Bee winner, he also values testing his knowledge on a national scale.

He also enjoys giving back to the local community- he has volunteered in several cleanup campaigns and walks for education and diabetes awareness, and was the flagbearer at the Sri Lankan Independence Day Celebrations. Thanusan also represents the U-19 team of YTCA Dubai in provincial tournaments, and would definitely love playing for Toronto's cricket team.

Going by the above, I firmly believe Thanusan will add academic, leadership and creative value to the community of Pearson scholars.

The main issues are, my answer is way over the limit at 391 words - do any sections appear unnecessary? Should I focus on only two or three achievements, since the word limit is small? Thanks in advance!
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Jan 7, 2022   #2
Having known Thanusan personally for years

Since this is still a recommendation letter, you still need to follow the name format for a referee. Kick it off by saying something creative like, " I am Thanusan's inner self. I have known him since he was born x years ago. This close relationship is why I believe I know him better than he knows his public persona." Such an opening would prepare the reviewer for an indepth personal presentation.

Now, the essay definitely highlights all your possible strengths as a student. You are super when it comes to academics. What about your weak points? The prompt might make it sound optional but believe me, the reviewer wants to know about any academic, personal, or social weakness you would be comfortable sharing as well. He wants to know about your character balance too.
OP Ben14062002 1 / 1  
Jan 7, 2022   #3
Thanks for the feedback! I have made some changes. Please go through it if possible:

I am Thanusan's inner self. I have known him for more than 18 years, and this close relationship is why I believe I know him better than he knows his public persona.

Thanusan was always keen on learning constantly. Although he topped the school with the only 4 A result at AS Level, he wished to expand his knowledge beyond academic boundaries. Last summer, he undertook an eight-week Duke University course in nanotechnology, through which he gained useful insight into the technologies used in biomedicine to diagnose diseases. Additionally, he is currently working on the Cambridge EPQ, an independent research project, where he explores the possibility of modifying RNA to treat cancers. Being the IOF Olympiad national champion in Cyber and English (2018), MaRRS National Math Bee 2017 Champion, and three-time Royal Spelling Bee winner, he also values testing his knowledge on a national scale.

For many years, a flaw in his otherwise disciplined character had been his natural tendency to procrastinate, often leaving exam revisions and projects to be completed later intensively, but hastily. This prevented him from reaching his maximum productivity, a problem he realized in 2020, when he was unanimously elected School Head Boy after four years as a prefect. Understanding this great responsibility, he promised himself he wouldn't permit his personal blemish let down the school or students. Thanusan set early deadlines for council tasks and followed a manageable to-do list daily - and the Student Council ran quite efficiently. Events, including the Annual House Cup and Fitness Week, were organized successfully and issues were addressed well in advance. A highlight of his tenure was founding the AUS Wellbeing and Happiness Club, with the primary goal of preserving students' mental health to allow undisturbed academic focus. As part of the club's activities, he led his team in carrying out surveys, holding assemblies and assisting any affected students.

He also enjoys giving back to the people around him. Thanusan often organizes learning sessions on Zoom, where he mentors peers in subject matters. He has volunteered in several cleanup campaigns and walks for education and diabetes awareness, and was the flagbearer at the Sri Lankan Independence Day celebrations. Thanusan represents the U-19 team of Young Talents Cricket Academy Dubai in provincial tournaments, and would definitely love playing for Toronto's cricket team.

Going by the above, I firmly believe Thanusan will add academic, leadership and creative value to the Pearson community.


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