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I will get what I desire.



qomoco 24 / 104  
Jan 18, 2010   #1
I will get what I desire
For I'm reaching for the higher
Though, times, I lost sights of the stair
Nevertheless I still acquire
If you think I'm looking for fire
Then you are calling me a liar.
I will get what I desire.

or

I will get what I desire
For I'm reaching for the higher
Though, times, I lost sights of the stair
Nevertheless I still sought
If you think I'm looking for fire
Please lose that thought
I will get what I desire.

fznfire 1 / 28  
Jan 19, 2010   #2
I do not know much about poems but it seems dream works better than desire.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Jan 22, 2010   #3
I like the second a lot better because of "lose that thought."

I was thinking of "...you're wrong, I'm not"

Ha ha, good stuff. I don't know what looking for fire means, though.

:-)
OP qomoco 24 / 104  
Jan 22, 2010   #4
"lose that thought."

haha, I was wondering if that sentence sounded too immature but I guess it adds some humor to the poem.

Looking for fire means looking for trouble(fire will burn you) or looking to fail(when you want to achieve something great, a lot people would say "That kid is just looking for more trouble; he is going to fail." Or "That kid is just talking big (that's where calling me a liar came from)"

:)
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Jan 24, 2010   #5
Well, "lose that thought" is a colloquial expression that is not particularly immature. It is just colloquial. It is sort of poetic; to lose something deliberately seems to imply something more than just "to get rid of" it.

As for "looking for the fire," I think it is a great expression, but I have never heard it until now.
OP qomoco 24 / 104  
Jan 24, 2010   #6
Well, one can always come up with new expression. :] Maybe someday this expression will become famous.

or I can use

If you think I'm playing with fire. I guess this way people might understand better.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Jan 25, 2010   #7
Well, poetry is good for introducing new expressions. BUT you have to find a way to demonstrate to the reader what you mean. yes, "playing with fire" is commonly understood.

:-)


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