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AAS Supporting statement No.3 about doing something meaningful for the society



az23 5 / 13  
Apr 23, 2017   #1
3.How have you contributed to solving a challenge and to implementing change or reform? (Be specific and include: what aspect/s of your leadership knowledge, skills and practice you consider to be well established and effective; which people or organisations you worked with to solve the problem; and what creative methods were used.)*:

implementing an idea challenge



At my current job, I introduced the idea of celebrating environmental days, because I wanted to persuade my colleagues to do something meaningful for the society. The idea was not supported well at first since the lawyers were too busy with their "actual" work. So my first challenge was to persuade my co-workers of the importance and outcome of the activity. I had to plan and think even more after I was joined by some supporters, as they started to raise too many ideas. Since it was nearly impossible for all the people to fully agree on an idea, I started making final decisions on my own, taking the full responsibility to myself. Until now, we have organized number of activities towards the goal of raising awareness of our environment, including distributing materials related to saving water on the World Water Day and cleaning litter of a mountain on the Earth day. I think my responsibility and organizational skills have been the most valuable qualities that brought the idea to life.

After I started working at the firm, I've observed that associates of our law firm barely share their experiences gathered from their assignments, which resulted the associates not having information about the projects that other associates may have gained valuable experience. Based on my own observation and discussion with colleagues, I initiated the idea of weekly experience sharing session of associates, where associates could give some insight into their new experiences to others. Although the idea was supported, it was hard to be implemented in reality due to the heavy workload. Despite some failures, I managed to make the session, a regular routine of the firm. I'm sure that our colleagues, learned from each other's experiences, would have much more knowledge than our peers at competing firms, in the legal industry where knowledge is a crucial asset.

I can't say I have born with the qualities of a leader. However, I believe that I have acquired important leadership skills, such as organizational, taking responsibility, decision making and being innovative, thanks to my favorable experiences and challenges. I have no doubt that with these skills and habits I have acquired and are still developing, I'm able to do contribute to the society, regardless of my job or position.

tim912104a 1 / 2  
Apr 23, 2017   #2
In my opinion, the first sentence is the topic sentence in every paragraphs. Maybe you can highlight the abilities which you want to emphasize in every first sentence.

The subject of the verb is not clear in the sentence below (the Bold word).

However, I believe that I have acquired important leadership skills, such as organizational, taking responsibility, decision making and being innovative, thanks to my favorable experiences and challenges.
OP az23 5 / 13  
Apr 23, 2017   #3
@tim912104a
Yes, you're right. I will start all the paragraphs with the topic sentences.
Thank you very much for your help.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15393  
Apr 23, 2017   #4
Your essay does not properly work for the prompt. You have to use a situation at your office or at a volunteer activity where you displayed leadership skills because that is what the prompt is interested in. Do not say that you were not born with leadership skills. Remove that sentence but keep the rest of the paragraph. It is a strong part of the essay. If you do not have a stronger leadership experience to share, it would be best for you to just use paragraph 2 and 3 as the response to the essay. It has a better feel than the first paragraph that you wrote. It also has a closer response to the prompt even though it isn't as impressive as it should be. Normally, the stories shared in relation to this prompt are those that are memorable or impressive. Try to think of something along those lines so that you can aim to make an impression on the reviewer because of your admirable leadership skills.


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