The full question is-
Describe your academic objectives and indicate how these are appropriate to your long-range goals.
Please include specifically how a Bachelor's degree from the University of Toronto will contribute to your achieving your longer-range goals.
My answer is-
"I plan on pursuing Computer Science from the University of Toronto. My long-term goal is to create cyber-security systems because it is inevitable that the world is going to indulge more and more into the internet and technology as a whole and virtual security will keep becoming ever more important. Academically, I am determined to broaden my knowledge about computers and that is my primary goal but, proof of knowledge is vital too, and a degree at the University of Toronto is a perfect blend of world-class programs and the well deserved world-class recognition."
I'm not sure if this is good enough. Any points on how I could improve this would be appreciated.