Acceptance into a UK university is an opportunity of a lifetime for me which I do not intend to miss

Studying in the United Kingdom

Chevening Scholarship
Please guys could you please review my first draft.

Studying in the U.K

Outline why you have selected your chosen three university courses, and explain how this relates to your previous academic or professional experience and your plans for the future.

Please do not duplicate the information you have entered on the work experience and education section of this form (minimum word count: 100 words, maximum word count: 500 words)

Throughout my years of education in Papua New Guinea, the United Kingdom Universities have been renowned for educating our best Master's graduates who have returned and progressed the development of my country. Thus, being accepted into a UK university is an opportunity of a lifetime for me which I do not intend to miss.

I have chosen the Engineering Control Systems and Instrumentation MSc, Electronic and Communication Engineering MSc and Engineering Management MSc courses at the University of Huddersfield. These courses portray a deeper and direct continuation from my undergraduate Bachelor of Engineering in Electrical Engineering (Power) from the Papua New Guinea University of Technology. Although the undergraduate course made it possible for me to attain the fundamentals of Electrical Engineering (Power), they don't easily show an opportunity to fully understand the technologies that are currently within the world wide electric power industry. Therefore, it is still insufficient for a Graduate Electrical Engineer to analyse the professional world. I feel the need to be part of a Master's program in the United Kingdom, as it would equip me with the technical expertise I require to fulfil my professional desires and ambition. For my ambition is to grow with the ever changing advancement of Electrical Power technology in order to contribute significantly and boost the technological development of the power industry in Papua New Guinea.

It is good and very straight to the point. I think you should include some facts to show that you have chosen the right courses for your educational background.

Ben, your essay will not benefit your application. You have taken only 2 paragraphs to discuss what should be a 5 paragraph essay. The prompt is pretty specific about the requirements for the presentation. It seems that you did not bother to understand the requirements because if you did, then you would have developed a more appropriate response. The academic background should be one complete paragraph at the start of the essay. While the professional background can be integrated into the course discussion, which should be done in a paragraph format as well. One course, one university, one discussion, per paragraph. Do that 3 times for the 3 courses and universities. Individualized discussions are required in order to allow the reviewer to fully understand what the purpose of your studies, based on each masters course, actually is. How does it apply to your future career? What career paths are you considering taking and why? You can respond to those questions in the university discussions. Which is why those sections require an expanded discussion format.