Artisanal and small-scale mining (ASM) - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution?

Why Mining Engineering at UNSW or Curtin University?

My academic interest is broadly within sustainability, focusing on finding solutions to technical deficits in artisanal and small-scale mining (ASM). The ASM industry contributes 35% of Ghana's total gold output, but it remains underutilized and dominated by unsustainable practices. Consequently, mine sites are abandoned once the 'easy-to-mine' ore is extracted. The desire to integrate the necessary technical capabilities to achieve SDGs 14 and 15 piqued my interest in pursuing a Master's degree in Mining Engineering.

My proposed course of study at UNSW is a Master of Engineering (Mining). The programme's curriculum integrates analytical, design, and management skills relevant to the mining industry. I will benefit from state-of-the-art facilities, including a VR simulator, computer laboratory and a rock mechanics laboratory for applied research into mining issues. The degree requires 60 days of industrial training, allowing you to develop the essential technical and professional skills needed to thrive in your future career.

My proposed course of study at Curtin University is a Master of Professional Engineering (Mining Engineering). The course equips students with life-changing skills through an interactive curriculum, leadership programs, and excellent industry placements that give them an edge in the job market. Primarily, my interest stems from responsible mining and mine design and optimization.

You sound like you are just repeating the course description and syllabus from the university websites. You spent more time explaining your academic goal than you did explaining how the courses will be used in your workplace after completing the course. That is whole point of explaining why you chose the course and institution. The screener already knows what the university is all about and what the masters courses are about. What he wants to know is how these apply to your present job or future work responsibilities. There is no sense of that in this essay. Sure you can say you will benefit from the training, but it is the relevance of the application to your profession that will prove that you have chosen the proper course for your academic and professional targets, speficially the SDG goals of your country in this area.