Many years ago I attended summer camp at your school, Math Camp with Mr. Tiger. I had to do a double take he seem so bubbly & full of postive feedback toward the whole class. Lastly his humor & abilty to make math fun to the point when the class was over I didn't want to leave.
Why do you want to attend St. Bede academy?
Many years ago I attended summer camp at your school, Math Camp with Mr. Tiger. I hadam eager to do a double take, since he seemed so bubbly & full of postive feedback toward the whole class. Lastly his sense of humor & abilty to make math fun wasso stirring thatto the pointby the time when the class was over I didn't want to leave.
I don't know what is the required minimum of words for this type of writing. Neverthless, it is very shot; may be you ought to add a few more sentences.
I don't know what is the required minimum of words for this type of writing. Neverthless, it is very shot; may be you ought to add a few more sentences.
This is WAY too short for a scholarship essay, in my opinion. An essay usually consists of five paragraphs (each with 5-7 sentences). The first paragraph is usually an opening paragraph (with a thesis), the next 3 are each about specific points, and the last paragraph is your closing statement.
You have 3 sentences, but I feel having a clear guide on what you want to say can be a good thing. You could talk perhaps about what drew you to that specific summer camp, what you went to the Math Camp to do. You could talk about how Mr. Tiger gave you a glimpse into the kind of education you could have, and contrast that with the kind of education you were current recieving. You could talk as well about what ELSE draws you to that school- you could mention some of your other experiences at camp and the things that draw you there specifically.
I think having one teacher as a draw could be a good thing, but I think for an admittance essay you should add to what you have written.
Is there a word limit, or sentence limit on the essay?
You have 3 sentences, but I feel having a clear guide on what you want to say can be a good thing. You could talk perhaps about what drew you to that specific summer camp, what you went to the Math Camp to do. You could talk about how Mr. Tiger gave you a glimpse into the kind of education you could have, and contrast that with the kind of education you were current recieving. You could talk as well about what ELSE draws you to that school- you could mention some of your other experiences at camp and the things that draw you there specifically.
I think having one teacher as a draw could be a good thing, but I think for an admittance essay you should add to what you have written.
Is there a word limit, or sentence limit on the essay?
Yes, this needs to be developed some more. When you write, try to share a unique insight. This is a simple thing to say, but I bet you have a profound observation to make. Did his personality affect you in a way that made you apply some of the principles he applied when speaking to a group of people? Maybe this essay is about an insight you gained pertaining to public speaking. Good speakers exert energy that everyone can enjoy.