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'Do your best' - scholarship essay



sebastiann436 3 / 4  
Nov 26, 2012   #1
i'll need to make an essay to apply for scholarship,, the essay must be about 'beliefs or values you hold strongly', it should be less than 300 words, please help me to edit it. i'll have to submit it before december 15, and i'm still not very confident about my essay,

any feedback would be much appreciated, thx!

'Do Your Best, and God Will Do the Rest'. I began to believe those words some years after I first heard it. For me, not only that it encourages me to always do my best in my life, but is also gave me hope to do things which I thought I couldn't. I realized that, sometimes when we make plans, some unexpected things could happen. Some things that could either break those plans or, in other fortunate times, gave us even more gain than we predicted. Some other times we had to face things which seemed to be an impossible thing. Last year, just a few days before the Science Olympiad began, my teacher told me that I'll be sent as my school's representative for that year's Physics Olympiad. That time I haven't prepared a thing, and all I have is a few days to study. My physics teacher didn't prepare me for the upcoming test, instead she gave me some test samples and asked me to study on my own. And I did study on my own. I gave all I could to prepare myself for the olympiad just some days ahead. It's a surprising thing that I could proceed to province level of the olympiad, since I was the first from my school to ever proceed to this level in physics. I make plans for my future. I do my best to make it happen, but still, from time to time something would go wrong and make my plans seemed impossible. Sometimes I revise my plans, sometimes I don't. What I knew I can do is to do my best for what I have planned, to give all I can for my plans, and pray that God will do the rest.

scosc - / 3  
Nov 26, 2012   #2
Hello,

I like how you started, nice quote. However as you move I think you should give stronger examples of your preserverance in completing whatever activity is given, and also why you believe that this scholarship would be beneficial for you.

Good luck


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