Hi all, I would really appreciate some feedback on my Peace Corps essay. I don't know if it stands out enough. Also, I need a fresh pair of eyes to check over grammar. I appreciate any help! Thank you in advance
It is a core belief of mine that where and to whom you are born should not dictate the quality of one's life. As a man who was blessed to be born into a rather privileged life, I feel that it is my duty to help those less fortunate.
I could spend a paragraph explaining how I believe this experience will help me grow as a person, submerge myself in another culture and possibly learn another language but I won't. When I think of the conditions that one Peace Corps Volunteer described to me; having to use an outhouse, sleep in a tent, and fetch water from a well, I do not think learning a new language will be enough motivation. Conversely, what will motivate me in those conditions is knowing that I'm making another human being's life better.
Although I have lived a relatively sheltered life, I am not ignorant to the perils of people around the world. The first time I was exposed to extreme poverty was on a family trip to Syria. Following this I asked myself why I have clean water, good food, a great education etc. while others don't? I found the answer to be simple. The reason why I have these things is because there was someone that willing and able to help me. Since this experience, the service that I have given has always been motivated by the realization that I'm willing and able to make someone else's' life better.
I have been willing to help the international community for some time now. Unfortunately, it was not until just a few months ago that I felt able. Now that I have graduated from Arizona State University with my Bachelor's of Science, I know I am able to help. The reason I want to do this now is related to my future life goals. Once I enter the workforce and have a family, it will be much more difficult to commit to the first Core Expectation.
If only by the sheer number of applications to the Peace Corps, it's obvious that I'm not the only person that wants to improve people's lives. What sets me apart is my economic background. While not the focus of the fourth Core Expectation, it mentions "sustainable development work". This is what I love to focus on in my service work. The old proverb "catch a man to fish; you have fed him for a day. Teach a man to fish; you have fed him for a lifetime" rings true with me. I'm interested in making an impact that will be felt by multiple generations in my host country.
Ironically, I think the two Core Expectations that I've mentioned will be the most difficult. Leaving the familiar is never an easy process and it will only be exacerbated by the fact that I'll be working with people who are in their native environment. I have found in my experience that these fears are natural in any unfamiliar circumstance and often disappear the moment work begins.
I have considered many alternatives and am certain that no other experience will give me the opportunity to positively affect the lives of people around the world like the Peace Corps. Further, I believe my past experience and desire to help others will make me effective Peace Corps Volunteer. It is
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It is a core belief of mine that where and to whom you are born should not dictate the quality of one's life. As a man who was blessed to be born into a rather privileged life, I feel that it is my duty to help those less fortunate.
I could spend a paragraph explaining how I believe this experience will help me grow as a person, submerge myself in another culture and possibly learn another language but I won't. When I think of the conditions that one Peace Corps Volunteer described to me; having to use an outhouse, sleep in a tent, and fetch water from a well, I do not think learning a new language will be enough motivation. Conversely, what will motivate me in those conditions is knowing that I'm making another human being's life better.
Although I have lived a relatively sheltered life, I am not ignorant to the perils of people around the world. The first time I was exposed to extreme poverty was on a family trip to Syria. Following this I asked myself why I have clean water, good food, a great education etc. while others don't? I found the answer to be simple. The reason why I have these things is because there was someone that willing and able to help me. Since this experience, the service that I have given has always been motivated by the realization that I'm willing and able to make someone else's' life better.
I have been willing to help the international community for some time now. Unfortunately, it was not until just a few months ago that I felt able. Now that I have graduated from Arizona State University with my Bachelor's of Science, I know I am able to help. The reason I want to do this now is related to my future life goals. Once I enter the workforce and have a family, it will be much more difficult to commit to the first Core Expectation.
If only by the sheer number of applications to the Peace Corps, it's obvious that I'm not the only person that wants to improve people's lives. What sets me apart is my economic background. While not the focus of the fourth Core Expectation, it mentions "sustainable development work". This is what I love to focus on in my service work. The old proverb "catch a man to fish; you have fed him for a day. Teach a man to fish; you have fed him for a lifetime" rings true with me. I'm interested in making an impact that will be felt by multiple generations in my host country.
Ironically, I think the two Core Expectations that I've mentioned will be the most difficult. Leaving the familiar is never an easy process and it will only be exacerbated by the fact that I'll be working with people who are in their native environment. I have found in my experience that these fears are natural in any unfamiliar circumstance and often disappear the moment work begins.
I have considered many alternatives and am certain that no other experience will give me the opportunity to positively affect the lives of people around the world like the Peace Corps. Further, I believe my past experience and desire to help others will make me effective Peace Corps Volunteer. It is