Essay for Chevening Scholarship - Study In The UK and preferred courses

Chevening choice of courses

Studying in the county where the social policy was first created is the best solution to improve my knowledge and skills as a social worker. The UK has a social policy that is older than in other countries around the globe. In 1601, Elizabeth Poor law was invented to tackle human problems. Furthermore, the community and the social policy association are the reasons because I will meet many people from other backgrounds to understand more about that.

My first preferred course is an MA in Social Policy at the University of Birmingham. Poverty is still the highest problem in Indonesia. I had experience in my field study of distributing aid from the government to poor people but many people with well-being conditions receive that support but the poor people did not receive it because regulation of the social policy was not implemented well. One of the core modules about poverty, health, and equality that are crucial to my goals and decrease poverty in Indonesia. Graduating from this institution will have an impact not only on myself but also on increasing people's well-being related to poverty.

My second preferred course is an MSc in Social Change and Policy at the University of Sheffield. One of the core modules is an international social change and social problems that I am interested in. Indonesia has 26 social welfare problems, one of those in poverty. With this core module, I hope to evaluate and create a better social policy to solve the problem because many regulations are still not effective. After graduating from university I will help to evaluate a social policy that was created to solve the problems.

My third preferred course is an MA in Social Policy at the University of York. In this institution, they provide social policy analysis and research training that are important to develop my knowledge and skill. One of the modules about Globalization and social policy that talk about a range of global social policy issues, such as poverty and inequality is crucial to my goals.

Studying a social work subject, doing an internship in the social institution, and working with local people make me understand that studying social policy will help many people in Indonesia and create a big impact because this is a way I can either evaluate social policy created by the government or non-government organization or create a new policy that better for to the society.

Upon completion of my master's study, one of my goals I will try to increase voluntary activities because Based on The World Giving Index (WGI) in 2018, Indonesia was in the first rank of over 140 countries. Three charitable acts are 46 % helping a stranger, 78 % donating money, and 53% voluntary time. But the fact shows that 25,14 million live in poverty even though Indonesia has become the most charitable country in the world. I will collaborate with the government to create better social policy and maximize voluntary activities.

There are several points of information presentation in your essay that are not required. The reference to the Elizabeth Poor Law is unnecessary as it does not reflect any part of your academic or professional training and instead, pertains to UK law, which does not apply in your home country. The last paragraph of this essay is also not required as it is more relevant to the post study plans essay. Remove the last paragraph and use it in the relevant essay presentation instead.

Your paragraphs are mostly difficult to understand. The wording is confusing and the reference to your relevant education and professional experience is difficult to follow. The problem is mostly with the sentence structure. The clarity of your presentation is lacking. You should also be more specific when you say that a certain course will help you achieve your professional goal. What is that goal? Explain how the course is relevant to it. That problem exists in the third course preference.

Thank you so much for your suggestion Holt

Hi @Brelyantika16 in terms of choice of courses, I think you should emphasize the specialties of this university which makes it better among other university offering the same Major. This essay does not seem like you have to go to that uni because that university offers things that are not provided in other university, instead it shows no explanation on why you choose the uni.