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Since skinned knees and bruised elbows crossing over boys on the recess asphalt, my passion has been basketball. One goal I have is to place at the State basketball tournament - proudly sporting black and red jerseys that have been overlooked, even derided, in the past. I will continue to elevate team confidence and trust. Inspirational coaches have caused me to value enthusiasm and the ability to compete as well as love and cherish teammates. In fifth grade, at 5'8, I scripted a diary goal to play on a college team. Seven years and no further inches later, that goal to contribute to a collegiate athletic family remains. Though I have not been offered scholarships, I am contacting coaches, turning in applications, and focusing on improving my athletic and leadership skills because of my passion.
I attend a lower income inner city public school. Opportunities in sports often prove less than our wealthy competition as kids' development is frequently paralleled by their participation in clubs and camps during childhood. Contributing to a group dynamic is beneficial for youth growth, allowing crucial skills such as building from constructive criticism and communication during stress. In the future, I would like to run camps and coach a summer league available for kids who do not start with an environment of extra money or time for sports. This summer, I plan to coach a YMCA team, volunteer with my high school camp, and ref summer league to get experience with coaching.
My short term education goal is not a grade point average. Instead, it is to finish my final semester with a strong learning inclination. To avoid complacency with school, I will strive to keep stretching the initial limits of my brain. My goal is to not fear failure, to ask more questions, and to genuinely grasp topics. My mother, an immigrant from Malaysia was the only woman in her family to graduate high school and leave to receive a higher education; at times, for which she was ridiculed. Along with my father, an avid lover of learning, her roots motivated me to embrace the liberal education opportunities provided in America, to cherish the gift of knowledge.
I want to become a dermatologist. Growing up, I have experienced eczema and acne, common skin conditions that have at times degraded my self confidence. In addition, numerous family members of mine are living with melanoma, living because of dermatology. My current plan is to graduate with a bachelor's in Pre-Health, finish medical school, and complete internship and residency programs. I hope to take part in clinical research relating to dermatology. Currently, I am participating in a double blinded placebo to test a new drug through Premier Clinical Research, increasing my interest. I plan to use my personal traits gained from sports to motivate myself through peaks and valleys which difficult courses and concepts will impose. Similarly, throughout my career, I hope to motivate patients through trials, building a trust and a family-like network.
Since skinned knees and bruised elbows crossing over boys on the recess asphalt, my passion has been basketball. One goal I have is to place at the State basketball tournament - proudly sporting black and red jerseys that have been overlooked, even derided, in the past. I will continue to elevate team confidence and trust. Inspirational coaches have caused me to value enthusiasm and the ability to compete as well as love and cherish teammates. In fifth grade, at 5'8, I scripted a diary goal to play on a college team. Seven years and no further inches later, that goal to contribute to a collegiate athletic family remains. Though I have not been offered scholarships, I am contacting coaches, turning in applications, and focusing on improving my athletic and leadership skills because of my passion.
I attend a lower income inner city public school. Opportunities in sports often prove less than our wealthy competition as kids' development is frequently paralleled by their participation in clubs and camps during childhood. Contributing to a group dynamic is beneficial for youth growth, allowing crucial skills such as building from constructive criticism and communication during stress. In the future, I would like to run camps and coach a summer league available for kids who do not start with an environment of extra money or time for sports. This summer, I plan to coach a YMCA team, volunteer with my high school camp, and ref summer league to get experience with coaching.
My short term education goal is not a grade point average. Instead, it is to finish my final semester with a strong learning inclination. To avoid complacency with school, I will strive to keep stretching the initial limits of my brain. My goal is to not fear failure, to ask more questions, and to genuinely grasp topics. My mother, an immigrant from Malaysia was the only woman in her family to graduate high school and leave to receive a higher education; at times, for which she was ridiculed. Along with my father, an avid lover of learning, her roots motivated me to embrace the liberal education opportunities provided in America, to cherish the gift of knowledge.
I want to become a dermatologist. Growing up, I have experienced eczema and acne, common skin conditions that have at times degraded my self confidence. In addition, numerous family members of mine are living with melanoma, living because of dermatology. My current plan is to graduate with a bachelor's in Pre-Health, finish medical school, and complete internship and residency programs. I hope to take part in clinical research relating to dermatology. Currently, I am participating in a double blinded placebo to test a new drug through Premier Clinical Research, increasing my interest. I plan to use my personal traits gained from sports to motivate myself through peaks and valleys which difficult courses and concepts will impose. Similarly, throughout my career, I hope to motivate patients through trials, building a trust and a family-like network.
