A description of professional background & current work, professional accomplishment, Why this work?

Hello, every one I appreciate your reviews in my answers for an application. for a single question about professional background and current work, professional accomplishments within the last year.

Why have you chosen this work?

(200 words)

Thanks in advance.

My name is xxxxx. I graduated from xxx University in 2009 with Bachelor's of science in management information systems. I was one of the top students graduate with distinction consequently I was selected as a lecturer in the university. Afterward, I did continue my master's study and graduated in 2013 with a Master of Science in information science from xxxxx University. Currently, I am a third-year Ph.D. student at xxx University also a lecturer at xxx University. In June 2017, I defend my dissertation proposal. This was a great accomplishment in the dissertation process. I have involved in various activities like teaching, advising students, curriculum development, and chairman of a social committee, member of department academic committee, team leader of the industry-university linkage office at xxx University. I chose teaching because of the desire to transform my community to the information society and to contribute my own. More importantly, my choice originated from my belief that Education in every possible way is one of the fundamental factors of development. No country can achieve sustainable development without education. As Mandela said, "Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world."

@KbMt
Are you supposed to answer the question in ESSAY form or just a regular Q&A form?
It is not clear to me EXACTLY what your ACCOMPLISHMENTS are. You have listed that you were involved in various activities and held several posts. Specifically what did you accomplish in these posts. For example as the chairman of a social committee and team leader of the linkage office, what did you use these positions to fulfill?

@terminal28
thanks for your response!
I am expected to answer the question in ESSAY form.
it asks to write a most recent ACCOMPLISHMENTS.

Mar, you need to write about recent professional accomplishments. What you have written enumerates your academic accomplishments, which is not what the statement is asking for. Professional accomplishments do not include you being a current PhD student, nor does it entail a presentation of your college background. There is nothing in this essay that portrays a professional accomplishment on your part except you claiming to be a teacher. So work from there.

As a teacher, what sort of accomplishments have you completed? Look to any accolades, recognition, awards, or any sort of profession related highlights in your career. If you were awarded Teacher of the Year then that is a professional accomplishment. If you were promoted at any point during this year then that is also an accomplishment. You must explain how you ended up completing these accomplishments, or any variation thereof in order to properly respond to the prompt.

You have a proper response to your professional background, but not when it comes to current work and professional accomplishments. So you need to work on developing responses to those 2 aspects using my guide questions above. Only then will you have a relevant draft to work with.