Details and evidence of voluntary service to the local community. Scholarship essay.

Please provide details and evidence of your voluntary service to your professional/and or local community. This service must be outside of your work commitments. Only include voluntary service that has been undertaken in the last three years. (200 words)

I have been involved with variety of voluntary community service work such as surveillance for safety during the Asian Summit, anti drug and domestic violence. Notably, I participated in a campaign program called Let's Clean Up Vientiane in 2012 for two weeks as group leader. The campaign aimed to raise awareness about solid waste management among the youth focusing on separation by category and proper storage. The target groups of the activities were from primary, high schools, universities and households. My main roles were coordination with target groups and organizing activities including distribution of rubbish bag.

Moreover, in 2014, I volunteered to join the flooding protection program as a leader of youth ages between 16 and 25 in my community for three weeks. My main role was supervision of the team members and communication with other nearby communities to ensure the tasks has been properly done. The main activity in this program was to place sandbags on Mekong's riverbank to ensure that water would not overflow into the town and nearby communities nearby.

Both programs were short, but I am very satisfied with my small contribution with a great result of the work.

There are very few changes that need to be made. I'm unsure if your scholarship requires you to have only 200 words. However, I have provided some

changes to help with your essay. First, you should form two paragraphs. Your second paragraph should begin when you discuss joining the flood protection program. I'm unsure if your post requires you to have only 200 words. However, I have provided some

Here are some grammar changes:

1st paragraph: In the first sentence place "a" before variety. You should describe what you were doing with the anti-drug. Was it a campaign?

If so, put anti-drug campaign. The second sentence: place "a" before group leader.

2nd paragraph: Change part of the first sentence to: "...between the ages of 25..." You should also include your last sentence in the first paragraph.

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I have been involved with a variety of voluntary community service work such as anti drug and domestic violence campaigns. Notably, I participated in a campaign program called Let's Clean Up Vientiane in 2012 for two weeks and Flooding Protection Program in 2014 for three weeks.

Clean Up Vientiane campaign aimed to raise awareness about solid waste separation by category and proper storage targeting to the youth from primary, high schools, universities and households. My main role was a group leader to coordinate with target groups and organize activities including distribution of rubbish bags. This program has provided me experience of leadership role in practical, which has kept me motivated to continue my voluntary service.

Two years later, I attended the Flooding Protection Program as a leader of youth between the ages of 16 and 25. My main role was team supervision and communication with other nearby communities to ensure the tasks has been properly done. The main activity in this program was to place sandbags on Mekong's riverbank to ensure that water would not overflow into the town and nearby communities nearby. I was very satisfied with my small contribution with a great result of the work.

I have provided some slight changes. Please check to see if this meets the 200 word requirement after you have made slight corrections.

1st paragraph: In the second sentence: Place "the" before anti-drug. Also, place "the" before flooding.

2nd paragraph: It seems as if you are discussing categorizing waste and properly storing wastes. Here is a suggestion on how you can improve that sentence:

"The Clean Up Vientiane campaign aimed to raise awareness about properly storing and separating solid waste, by educating students from primary, high schools, and universities."

Place "the" before distribution. Change part of this sentence to: "This program has provided me experience in a leadership role, which..."

3rd paragraph: Change has to had. It seems as if you should end the last sentence with..."that resulted in great work".