I am applying for the AAS to attain a Doctor's degree.I'd be very glad to receive feedback from professional contributors.
Aas study and career contribution
Currently I work as a lecturer of undergraduate students. While being a lecturer means to become a teacher and researcher, pursuing the Doctor's degree in Applied Linguistics will contribute to my career advancement as both a teacher and a lecturer. First, the proposed study opens more opportunities for me to train my teaching skills in-depth. I have gained adequate teaching skills from my Master's and Bachelor's degrees. However, I still lack the skill of fitting the language classroom into the 21st century demands. My weakness may be caused by inadequate analyses and implementation of recent findings and practices. Meanwhile, the doctorate program will sharpen my overall teaching skills by rigorously reviewing best practices. Being able to teach better will help improve my students in many ways as I believe the better I teach, the better my students will be. Moreover, I can also share my successful teaching practices to other teachers so that I can multiply the positive effect. This way, I can see myself a well-educated member of society in the field.
Secondly, my career as a researcher will be particularly supported by the study. Up to this point, I have identified my weaknesses in researching. They include inaccurate reading of research urgency, lack of experiences in applying various research methods, and lack of analysis and discussion skills. The proposed study will conscientiously address these weaknesses thus assist me with my career. The study will intensively train my researching skills because during my study most learning experiences will involve research that aims to deepen my understanding of a specific topic. Aside from the experiences in research, I can also enrich my experience in publishing journal articles with the professors. All published articles will be recorded as credits that contribute to my career promotion. Finally, upon completing the Doctor's degree, I can become a well-educated society and a highly trained professional workforce.
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You have spoken in depth about the skills refinement and training that this course will offer you. That is actually an excellent discussion to have in this statement. However, you neglected to explain how the studies will contribute to your career advancement. What is the ultimate goal for you as a professional? Are you sure your ultimate goal in achieving a doctorate is limited only to skills enhancement on the theoretical, practical, and research side?
There is no ambition on your part to perhaps become a professor? Or perhaps spin off into a consultancy career? There is no clear career development in your essay. You focused too much on skills improvement that you neglected to plan the next step in your career that the doctorate should help you address. Maybe you have the opportunity to become a tenured professor after this? Or you have plans to launch your own school? You have to remember, the prompt is asking you to look forward based on 3 considerations. Where do you see your career heading after you complete this course? Go beyond the technical, go beyond the theoretical. Try to discuss each aspect in an individual paragraph so that you cover all the bases in this response:
- Practical in relation to your teaching skills
- Theoretical in relation to your research interests and goals
- Personal when considering your career advancement after completing the course
That means, you need to show 3 direct response paragraphs in this essay. Write a new essay instead of editing this version. That way you can say what you need, without worrying about the 2000 character count in the revision. Starting from 0 will allow you to clearly discuss how you expect the course completion to contribute to your career, within the 2000 character count.
To make your application stand out, I think your set a higher rather just being lecturer. Maybe you want to be a respected professor that publish your work in international journal. Set a higher career goals.
Your feedback is very helpful. Thank you very much.