Endeavour Leadership Essay Question - how MDPH assist my career development

Hi Holt and everyone, kindly help me & comment on this essay Q.

Development of individual's knowledge and expertise. (maximum 300 words)

Explain how the proposed activity will assist your professional development

As a general dentist with a special interest in Oral Health Promotion (OHP), I appreciate that dentistry particularly Dental Public Health (DPH) specialty is mainly focusing on the prevention of oral disease and promoting oral health to the whole community rather than to the individuals. My active involvement with the OHP programs for 5 years has urged me to conduct an evaluation on the effectiveness of these programs in the future. Even though I was equipped with the basic knowledge of DPH during my undergraduate studies, research and evaluation training was very minimal.

Thus, I believe by obtaining a Master of Dental Public Health (MDPH) degree in the {name of uni in Australia} will provide better understanding on the principles and practice of planning and evaluating oral health interventions and oral health care systems. This can support with the evaluation on the effectiveness of the current OHP programs, especially on 'Daily Toothbrushing for Students Program' that aims to instill the habit of toothbrush as a daily culture both in schools and at home and in a long run, it will reduce the prevalence of dental decay among school children.

The MDPH also aims at recognizing major oral health problems of a community with their solutions. The incidence of dental decay in {country} is worrying hopefully the course will provide guidance on implementing a more effective water fluoridation program to the whole {country} population regardless of their social inequalities.

Having a dissertation in the course will provide opportunity to practice and experience in conducting clear research and formal writing at a professional standard. This is very beneficial for undertaking research and its training in {country}'s population oral health.

Overall, the MDPH will definitely assist my career development in such a way that I will understand the oral health issues better both in {country} and the international context with effective solutions.

@plus there is a lacking reference to your professional goals in this essay. As the instruction implies, the essay is all about your professional development. Therefore, you must explain what your professional goals are that align itself with the course offerings and training programs of the Australian university. Your discussion is merely a general reference to the university objectives but you do not explain how it applies to your career as a dental health professional in your country. What you should be discussing in this essay is a reference to one specific major problem related to oral health in your country that you hope to resolve. Base your professional goals on that so that you can refer to specific courses and training within the program that will help to elevate your professional skills. You speak of a dissertation in this course. Expand on that. What is your potential study plan for the dissertation in relation to oral health in your country? What do you hope to learn during the course of the program and how you hope to use the knowledge you will gain in resolving major oral health issues in your country will help to better illustrate how your professional development will be assisted by your course of study.

Dear Holt, thank you very much for your response and really appreciate it. I will revise like what you had mentioned