If you want to go fast, go alone. If you want to go far, go together. Chevening

Buddies, i would be grateful to review my answer to the Networking question of Chevening scholarship application, what contents i would further develop or modify so that i can get a stronger networking essay.

Chevening is looking for individuals with strong networking skills, who will engage with the Chevening community and influence and lead others in their chosen profession. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your networking skills, and outline how you hope to use these skills in the future.

scholarschip application (networking)

(If you want to go fast, go alone. If you want to go far, go together.)
I'm a huge believer in giving back and helping out in the professional and the personal life and i remember many examples appeal with the African quote above that it's always easier with the people help to get where you want to be. Like people those with abundance mentality, I love to connect and engage with genuine and influential people, I used to share and support whenever there's a possibility. I discovered that when we truly understand the people intentions, respect our differences and communicate effectively, it becomes a habit to build sincere relationships, these relationships bond together to form my fruitful multicultural people network that I'm always trying to maintain and expand further.

I have had the chance to participate in several social activities which embodied the clues and the expectations behind the Chevening Award program, I believe in that acting in a responsible manner may simply be paying back for the social costs of doing any kind of business, one example is an educational development program that was accompanied with Injaz Egypt NGO, the program was called (Adopt a School) focusing on preparing the middle school, high school and university students to enter the workforce as qualified and skilled employees through empowering their personal and professional capabilities, having their minds fullest potential unleashed through expanding their confidence, knowledge and creativity. Through one-hour weekly training , for five consecutive weeks, with plenty of other volunteers, I covered four main pillars of the program as follows;

1-Giving students the necessary skills to succeed within the world-class firms.
2-Discussing with the teachers the modern interactive teaching techniques (like video, e-Learning, etc..)
3-Creating a better learning environment by planning for upgrading the school's facilities.
4-Planning extra activities in the future for the parents and work with them on the school upgrading committee.

Upon completing the training series the students became more confident about their capabilities, equipped with the essential visions and skills that would help plan their career, they also got a network of professional mentors with various backgrounds so that they can call on for help at any time. (Every single minute given by the volunteer is a step forward to empowering and inspiring this next generation of young Egyptians who are the catalyst for change and soon are bound to be the driving force of Egypt's future economy.) Mireille Nashaat said, Programs Manager of INJAZ Egypt.

For the terrific values on myself and the youth people, I love to go through similar activities a million time, engage with the Chevening community, influence and lead others in their chosen profession. If I would succeed to study the clean and renewable energy as my postgraduate subject, I would surly study how to link between the academic study and the labor force, for example where the young engineering students could simulate the academic theories of renewable energy, realize and see how it all work.

@moessam85

First of all, I do like that quote in the opening sentence and also used it in my essay. :)

Now to the writing, I think you have not shown any of your networking skills there. A little guidance I once read in this forum: It should show an evidence of the networks that you have built, how you nurture it, and how you will use it in the future.

Also, the use of yet another quote in the third paragraph might make people consider it as a word filler. I think it would be better to avoid that.

Mohamed, your essay will not be useful in your application. You are merely explaining what you believe networking means and how you have developed those skills for use in your workplace. There is no clear membership in any organization that is affiliated with your profession which can lead you towards career growth. You need to signify how you use various organizations in your workplace because of the differing work situations that you face which may require you to look to others, who are not part of your workplace for further assistance. It would be best for you to try and think about your membership in various organizations related to your work place activities or work skills development in order to better respond to this essay. You need to create an idea as to how these networks provide you with a work related benefit and then inform Chevening of the benefits this may bring the other scholars as well. The network you have needs to be presented in a shared contact manner so that your essay will stand out in usefulness.