"Future Plan after Study" , Design product - is an assistant.

Hello, this is my draft essay about "Future Plan after Study"
I tried to include everything that is relevant to career post study plan...
Since I see that essay came up very short and I feel that I certainly missed something (but cant catch what exactly), I am
asking for you assistance and guidance.
There are possible many grammar mistakes, which I also need to eliminate with your help.
Thank you.

o Future plan in Korea or another country after study in Korea

Disabled issues in design

After graduation of Master Degree in Industrial Design I intend to patent my project that devoted to people with disabilities. First of all, I want to dedicate my efforts and abilities to the Korea, as a country that granted me with all relevant knowledge and education,that assisted me to create final product. Thus, I desire to work in collaboration with local and international Korean companies such as Samsung, LG or others. By doing so, I hope not only succeed on quality of the product, but also make it reliable and affordable for all users. Moreover

After collaboration experience, I will be more capable to create own design/architectural studio back to my country. Since the situation of single senior people and disabled must be reconsidered in (name of the country), I will share earned knowledges and experience among team grope so that proved a better performance and accomplishment in relevant task. Also, I will be concerned to lead patented product into the mass.

Moreover, my plans for developing and solving "Disabled people issue" will not have just a local character but will spread far beyond my native country. By co-working with other architectural, engineer-technological and design studios and companies, I will be focused on creating convenient and friendly environment for handicapped, senior age people and children.

By experiencing all above, I want to consolidate my knowledge by doing PhD degree on corresponding subject. Subsequently, my next intent is to be an professional lecturer. I aspire to educate people about " Disabled issues in design" and give the society all knowledge that I know, so that future generation may be more aware and responsible

Anastasiia, you have to double check your grammar and punctuation issues in this essay. The use of certain terms are incorrect and create a confusing reference in the essay. For example, what exactly do you mean by "... , I will share earned knowledges and experience among team grope..." What is a grope? Grope is an action that means "feel about or search blindly or uncertainly with the hands." I think you meant to say "group" which would create a redundancy because a team is already considered a group. In the first paragraph, you have a period then the word "Moreover" but then nothing else after that. Either remove the word or complete the sentence. With regards to your patent, you have to make sure that you mention you will be filing a double patent for that product because you plan to patent it in Korea then manufacture it in your home country upon your return. If you patent something in Korea, you may end up with a legal problem in your hands if you manufacture it in your home country. Make sure you own the patent and indicate the same in the essay.

ohhh, I was so quick and sloppily with my text edition before posting here.
that is why somewhere I had such a silly mistakes :(
But now I edited it according to your critic.
I will be so grateful if you will look at my work one more time

After graduation of Master Degree in Industrial Design I intend to patent my project that has devoted to assist people with disabilities. Foremost, I will try to patent through РСТ (Patent Cooperation Treaty), that will help me reserve my right to enter over 140 countries that are members of the PCT. Consequently, I will be free to lead patented product into mass.

Primarily, I want to dedicate my efforts and abilities to Korea, as a country that granted me with all relevant knowledge and education. Therefore, I desire to work in collaboration with local and international Korean companies such as Samsung, LG or others. By doing so, I hope not only to succeed on quality of the product, but also make it reliable and affordable for all users.

With collaborative experience, I will be more capable to create my own design/architectural studio back to my country. Since the situation of single senior people and disabled must be reconsidered in (name of the country). I will share earned knowledege and experience among my team, so that prove a better performance and accomplishment in relevant tasks.

Moreover, my plans for developing and solving "Disabled people issue" will not have just a local character but will spread far beyond my native country. By co-working with other architectural, engineer-technological and design studios and companies, I will be focused on creating convenient and friendly environment for handicapped, senior age people and children.

By performing all above, I want to consolidate my knowledge by doing PhD degree on corresponding subject. Subsequently, my next intention is to be a professional lecturer. I aspire to educate people about " Disabled issues in design" and give the society all knowledge that I know, so that future generation will be more aware and responsible.

While timelines are usually required in the post study career plans essay, the complexity of the profession you will be entering into after graduation will definitely create a problem. So not indicating a timeline for your return to your mother country seems to make sense in this essay. The process of giving back to Korea that you stated is unique. These patents, will allow you to start your career in Korea, and yet take the patents with you to benefit your home country when the time comes. Good work on explaining how you plan to use the patents to benefit both countries. So, I guess you are wondering what the verdict is on this essay. You have actually done enough for this essay to be given a thumbs up for use. Go ahead and print it out. It is a very good supporting document at the moment. Good luck!

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